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The following is a special presentation
of the Not Quite Right Podcast,

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in which we discuss in detail entries to
our ****** flash fiction competition,

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the Not Quite Right Prize for Flesh
Fiction.

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This episode contains adult themes and is
not appropriate for listeners under the

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age of 18.

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And mum, if you're still listening,
that's on you.

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Something doesn't seem quite right.

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Well, hello.

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Hi, I'm Ed, I'm Amanda,
and welcome to the third and possibly

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final Baredevil.

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Now,
Baredevils are people who have signed up

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for the honour and the privilege of being,
let's put it simply,

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straight up ****** by Amanda and I
together.

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It's a bit of a threesome sometimes,
you know.

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We'll read the story,
we'll share our thoughts,

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we will no doubt have opinions and
hopefully we'll all learn something

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together.

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But I can't think of a nicer threesome
than with the One and Only Holly Sadowski.

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I think you speak for all of us.

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I think Holly deserves a little bit of
credit for actually being our first

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baredevil.

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Yeah, back in the day,
like before baredevils actually existed.

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Holly is 1/4 time Daredevil for counting
this time as well.

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And just just to clarify,
so we normally have daredevils, right?

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For those of you who are new here,
our Daredevils are the people who sign up

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to have their stories critiqued on air
and.

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And the baredevils are the ****** fiction
version of that.

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But yes, as you mentioned,
Holly took revenge on us early in the

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piece.

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Holly had written another story and we
critiqued it.

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And I mean, she did ask for it,
but then came back again guns blazing

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with a spicy story.

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So yes, Holly submitted her story,
Johnson and Johnson as a daredevil,

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as a as not quite right prize entry back
in the first year of the not quite right

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prize, the first full year back in 2024.

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So if you flick back through the archives,
I'm sure you'll find it.

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It was highly.

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It was a highly sexual sexual it was and
she forced you to read it and it we let's

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call it the spade a spade here.

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It was an ****** fan fiction.

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It was featuring myself and and yeah,
yeah,

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in absentia if it let's let's close that
book.

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Let's park that whole chapter.

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If you're interested,
go back into the archives.

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But anyway, Holly's back.

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So Holly has chosen to embarrass us once
again, and we love her for it.

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It's a love hate thing.

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Yeah, but it's mostly love.

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But this time,
it's not me who's being embarrassed.

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It's you, Amanda and I.

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For that, I'm especially grateful.

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Yes, well,
I know what happens in this story.

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And I'm already sweating.

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I've got my fork here.

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Where do you go?

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Oh,
so here is Fork Me Zaddy by Holly

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Sadowski.

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When I was a teenager,
I had posters of demigods plastered on my

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bedroom walls.

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Orpheus, Achilles, Perseus, Hercules,
especially Hercules,

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and every night headgear affixed to my
braces.

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I'd beg Zeus to make one of them fall in
love with me.

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In hindsight,
it was probably for the best that Zeus

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ignored the prayers of a hormonal 15 year
old girl.

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Or maybe it was ******* some mortal woman
to create a more age appropriate demigod

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for me.

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All I know is that year after year my
prayers went unanswered.

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Nisa, you're dreaming too small.

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My sister Persephone scolded.

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Why have the love of a demigod when you
could have the love of a God?

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Easy for her to say,
she was a full born goddess.

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I was half mortal and therefore only a
demigod.

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Who was I to set my sights on a God?

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But loathe as I was to admit it,
maybe she was right.

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So one night we sneaked out of the house
and set up offerings in Aphrodite's

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temple,
each of us praying for the adoration of a

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God.

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What my sister conveniently failed to
mention to me was to be specific in my

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request, because that ***** snagged Hades,
making her queen of the underworld.

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I, on the other hand,
would one day rule an entirely different

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realm.

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Standing before the mirror,
getting ready for my date,

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I still can't help but compare my
appearance to that of my sisters.

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Admittedly A pathetic tendency.

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My mother and sister are blonde and a
fair complexion.

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They are summer and spring personified,
like the morning sun shining through the

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trees,
the dew sparkling like fairy dust upon

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the grass.

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I, on the other hand,
favour my mortal father.

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Freckles dot my skin like the
constellations in the sky,

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and my Auburn curls are as unruly as a
lion's mane.

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I sigh,
questioning the decision to go On this

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date.

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Despite my better judgement,
I had caved and let Persephone set me up.

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Nessa,
she said you should be with an actual God

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as benefits your station.

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What she meant was my station as her
sister.

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The doorbell rings as I put the finishing
touches on my makeup.

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I walk to the door bracing myself.

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He may be a God,
but considering my past setups that

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doesn't mean a whole hell of a lot.

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I open the door and my panties
immediately flood at the site.

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Unintentionally,
my eyes immediately dart to his godly

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bulge.

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My gaze travels up this statuesque man to
his narrow hips and expansive chest and

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then broad shoulders I want to dig my
nails into.

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Dark thick hair curls at his ears with
cheekbones that could cut glass,

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and his Hazel eyes perfectly complement
his olive complexion.

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His large hawk nose somehow fits his
features rather than detracts from them.

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Or maybe I'm thinking about how I'd like
to sit on that face later tonight.

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Nyssa.

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He asks, extending a hand.

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I'm Olivia.

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I give my best seductive look and gaze up
at him through my lashes as I take his

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profit hand.

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It's a pleasure.

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Olivia brings my hand to his lips,
gently kissing it.

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Hades did not do your beauty justice.

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His voice is a deep baritone that
vibrates to my core.

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Splush.

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He tucks my hand under his arm.

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Come,
I have a feast awaiting us at my temple.

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My eyes widen.

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You have your own temple,
There must be some catch,

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some reason my sister would set me up
with such a perfect specimen.

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Olivia chuckles.

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I may be a lesser God,
but I have more followers than even your

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brother in Ioffer a prayer up to
Aphrodite in thanks as we set off.

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Olivier parks the car and places a hand
on my knee.

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We've arrived.

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I managed to tear my gaze away from his
rugged visage to look out the window,

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and my stomach drops at the sight.

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Is the temple behind the Olive Garden?

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I ask.

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Olivier chuckles.

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Beautiful and a sense of humour.

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I'm a lucky man.

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00:08:57.640 --> 00:08:59.840
The pieces start to click together.

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00:09:00.800 --> 00:09:02.400
Olive Garden.

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00:09:03.160 --> 00:09:09.775
Olivio Gardenius So you're the God of
Olive Garden, He says proudly,

bc16f0a3-5fcf-4e39-95c9-0ca7fda660dd-1
00:09:09.775 --> 00:09:15.720
spreading his arms wide as he escorts me
into the restaurant.

809b9a6c-c851-4870-a690-c0da2defc1e4-0
00:09:15.800 --> 00:09:19.792
I curse Aphrodite,
and then I curse Persephone,

809b9a6c-c851-4870-a690-c0da2defc1e4-1
00:09:19.792 --> 00:09:24.200
the hottest single God I've ever seen in
his D list.

3156af73-ce41-4e4f-ba21-e87d6bd0a6dd-0
00:09:24.720 --> 00:09:28.229
He's probably the official caterer to
Mount Olympus,

3156af73-ce41-4e4f-ba21-e87d6bd0a6dd-1
00:09:28.229 --> 00:09:32.600
but mostly I curse the bastardised
Italian food I'm about to eat.

1b882e9f-c15d-4b9d-be16-efe77092be77-0
00:09:37.920 --> 00:09:43.765
The moment we enter the establishment,
my eyes are assaulted by the faux Tuscany

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00:09:43.765 --> 00:09:47.013
decor,
and the pungent scent of garlic hangs

1b882e9f-c15d-4b9d-be16-efe77092be77-2
00:09:47.013 --> 00:09:48.239
heavy in the air.

a4346c08-60af-4326-ab8a-cbf5eba9025d-0
00:09:49.160 --> 00:09:52.360
It takes a good 20 minutes for us to push
through the crowd.

2f17b6d7-668c-47f3-b549-b3a6b9ea2372-0
00:09:52.360 --> 00:09:56.206
It devoted followers to Olivia's private
dining room,

2f17b6d7-668c-47f3-b549-b3a6b9ea2372-1
00:09:56.206 --> 00:09:59.840
the soles of my shoes sticking to the
tiled floor.

b82b1b6b-1bb7-47f5-95a3-1f2109c64f87-0
00:10:01.120 --> 00:10:04.080
People really love Olive Garden, ha?

43d97eea-cde0-47b3-a40e-ae9f51cb6f29-0
00:10:04.560 --> 00:10:07.160
I ask, scooching into the curved booth.

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00:10:08.160 --> 00:10:09.000
He chuckles.

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00:10:10.240 --> 00:10:13.880
Well, when you're here, your family.

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00:10:15.000 --> 00:10:16.720
I groan inwardly.

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00:10:17.240 --> 00:10:21.480
My brain and libido are warring like the
Titans against the Olympians.

8b8339e9-0313-4a32-80fc-61babe3cf568-0
00:10:22.360 --> 00:10:28.139
Does the embarrassment of his Olive
Garden realm outweigh his ********

8b8339e9-0313-4a32-80fc-61babe3cf568-1
00:10:28.139 --> 00:10:29.360
Redwood status?

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00:10:30.560 --> 00:10:35.061
Oblivious to my inner turmoil,
he waves his arm and an assortment of

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00:10:35.061 --> 00:10:38.520
Americanized Italian food materialises on
our table.

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00:10:39.280 --> 00:10:45.360
Olivier quickly tucks into his pasta,
marinara sauce wetting his lips.

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00:10:46.520 --> 00:10:52.611
My mind wanders,
wondering if he'd be as ravenous eating

4412a20f-5269-4347-a086-df49e7246c47-1
00:10:52.611 --> 00:10:53.360
me out.

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00:10:57.240 --> 00:10:58.920
Checkmate for the libido.

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00:11:01.880 --> 00:11:07.403
I grab a breadstick,
a bead of pre parmesan glistening at the

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00:11:07.403 --> 00:11:07.760
tip.

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00:11:09.000 --> 00:11:13.520
Olivia, I playing with the phallic carb.

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00:11:14.080 --> 00:11:16.880
I see you're generous with the portions.

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00:11:17.480 --> 00:11:20.560
I wonder if you're just as generous with
dessert.

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00:11:21.680 --> 00:11:27.120
His head darts up from his bottomless
pasta, finally focused on me.

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00:11:28.440 --> 00:11:34.170
I use the breadstick to slap my cheek,
trailing the bread down my neck to my

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00:11:34.170 --> 00:11:34.840
cleavage.

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00:11:35.840 --> 00:11:39.975
His pupils dilate,
focused on the buttery trail the

b92dbea4-da52-40c9-ac23-343d21b87f3e-1
00:11:39.975 --> 00:11:42.600
breadstick is leaving on my skin.

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00:11:43.480 --> 00:11:50.240
My other hand trails up his muscular
thigh, brushing against his tented crotch.

1efd1080-e704-4e48-9608-8bb60d1bd245-0
00:11:52.040 --> 00:11:56.720
Is that a breadstick in your pocket,
or are you just happy to see me?

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00:11:57.920 --> 00:12:03.853
His hand wraps around the back of my neck,
holding me steady as he kisses my jaw up

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00:12:03.853 --> 00:12:04.560
to my ear.

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00:12:06.080 --> 00:12:09.480
For you unlimited breadsticks.

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00:12:10.640 --> 00:12:15.520
I gasp as he takes my lobe between his
teeth, biting gently.

ab61837e-737a-423b-a003-0662e79714a4-0
00:12:16.480 --> 00:12:22.148
The floodgates are open and I know I'll
be leaving snail trails on the seat,

ab61837e-737a-423b-a003-0662e79714a4-1
00:12:22.148 --> 00:12:23.400
but I don't care.

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00:12:23.800 --> 00:12:30.560
I want, no need more Olivia.

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00:12:31.360 --> 00:12:32.200
I pant.

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00:12:33.320 --> 00:12:36.120
Yes, my tiramisu treasure.

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00:12:36.720 --> 00:12:41.462
He whispers,
his hand snakes up my skirt and I spread

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00:12:41.462 --> 00:12:44.360
my legs, ready to welcome him in.

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00:12:45.480 --> 00:12:47.360
You're so wet.

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00:12:47.920 --> 00:12:52.933
He whispers,
inserting 2 fingers inside me like a

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00:12:52.933 --> 00:12:55.240
never ending soup bowl.

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00:12:56.840 --> 00:13:02.280
His thumb grazes my **** and I arch my
back to get closer.

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00:13:02.960 --> 00:13:08.595
I wrap my arms around his shoulders,
hanging on for dear life as his fingers

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00:13:08.595 --> 00:13:09.840
work their magic.

bb7f3e84-df00-4340-b836-2b36ef5de368-0
00:13:10.760 --> 00:13:14.800
Olivia increases the tempo,
kissing and licking my neck.

34e31091-5335-4337-b430-bda66624c4fd-0
00:13:15.600 --> 00:13:19.680
I've been wanting to toss your salad
since I laid eyes on you.

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00:13:20.840 --> 00:13:27.600
Heat pulls at my centre and I cry out as
a wave of euphoria washes over me.

751742c0-c6c5-45a5-9ff1-ece132244e4e-0
00:13:28.000 --> 00:13:32.229
I cling to Olivia,
clutching him to me as his long fingers

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00:13:32.229 --> 00:13:33.520
make me *** again.

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00:13:36.320 --> 00:13:42.440
I open my eyes once I catch my breath to
find his Hazel eyes gazing at me.

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00:13:44.080 --> 00:13:45.520
You are exquisite.

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00:13:46.120 --> 00:13:53.600
He whispers kissing gently kissing the
tip of my nose, grabbing his hand.

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00:13:53.960 --> 00:13:58.520
I maintain eye contact as I suck my
juices off his fingers.

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00:13:59.600 --> 00:14:04.160
I gently push him back and begin undoing
his pants.

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00:14:06.120 --> 00:14:06.840
He gasps.

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00:14:07.680 --> 00:14:08.320
You don't have.

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00:14:08.840 --> 00:14:14.280
I silence him with a kiss and spit
strings from our lips as I pull back.

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00:14:15.400 --> 00:14:18.080
I'm hungry for some sausage.

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00:14:18.120 --> 00:14:21.706
I purr,
lowering myself until I'm kneeling in

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00:14:21.706 --> 00:14:22.720
front of him.

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00:14:23.880 --> 00:14:27.120
And what a glorious sausage it is.

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00:14:27.880 --> 00:14:32.980
With one hand wrapped around his shaft,
I take him into my mouth,

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00:14:32.980 --> 00:14:35.840
luxuriating at the field of his ****.

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00:14:36.640 --> 00:14:39.200
His fingers weave through my hair.

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00:14:40.160 --> 00:14:42.360
Grab those meatballs.

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00:14:43.600 --> 00:14:48.800
I do as he asks,
continuing to suck and kiss his ****.

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00:14:49.400 --> 00:14:53.680
His grip in my hair tightens and his
panting increases.

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00:14:54.440 --> 00:15:01.056
My hand drifts from his balls,
1 little finger slipping into that

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00:15:01.056 --> 00:15:02.360
glorious ***.

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00:15:03.360 --> 00:15:04.280
Nyssa.

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00:15:05.120 --> 00:15:07.400
He whispers my name like a prayer.

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00:15:07.800 --> 00:15:08.320
I'm.

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00:15:09.120 --> 00:15:13.360
His moan reverberates through the
restaurant in the halls of Olympus.

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00:15:13.960 --> 00:15:20.738
He erupts, and I take his sacred offering,
relishing my power to make a God reach

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00:15:20.738 --> 00:15:22.640
the heights of ecstasy.

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00:15:23.560 --> 00:15:27.360
And then I taste it.

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00:15:28.360 --> 00:15:31.360
His is no ordinary seed.

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00:15:32.320 --> 00:15:37.280
Warm, garlicky Alfredo fills my mouth.

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00:15:38.760 --> 00:15:45.138
I swallow,
wiping A stray drop of creamy sauce from

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00:15:45.138 --> 00:15:46.120
my chin.

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00:15:46.480 --> 00:15:50.742
I rise from my knees and curl up on
Olivia's lap,

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00:15:50.742 --> 00:15:56.880
his strong arms wrapping around me and
holding me tightly to his chest.

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00:15:57.480 --> 00:16:02.300
I gently shift my position,
straddling him with my skirt hiked to my

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00:16:02.300 --> 00:16:02.720
waist.

c9cb2bfb-d85b-4f99-b39d-96741ba2bb0c-0
00:16:03.760 --> 00:16:09.480
Fork me Sadie as he stuffs me like a
manicotti.

e0e7e2df-7ca8-4a4a-a8ee-a073c47b0221-0
00:16:09.480 --> 00:16:12.000
Ioffer up a prayer of thanks to Aphrodite.

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00:16:14.000 --> 00:16:16.600
Let Persephone have her crown.

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00:16:17.800 --> 00:16:23.000
I found paradise in pasta and Olivia's
arms.

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00:16:43.200 --> 00:16:46.000
So thank you, Holly, for your sexy story.

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00:16:46.480 --> 00:16:48.760
I'll never look at garlic sauce the same
way again.

d9dc155d-e2bd-48a4-b3f9-4d29275691e3-0
00:16:49.200 --> 00:16:51.452
Oh,
never look at garlic sauce the same way

d9dc155d-e2bd-48a4-b3f9-4d29275691e3-1
00:16:51.452 --> 00:16:51.760
again.

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00:16:51.760 --> 00:16:53.120
That's what I heard.

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00:16:57.200 --> 00:16:57.360
Uh huh.

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00:16:58.480 --> 00:17:01.440
But Holly's left us a message,
so we'll play that now.

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00:17:04.440 --> 00:17:08.254
Hi Ed and Amanda,
this is Holly from Kansas and this is my

43440f02-6c46-4f3a-ace9-2a25b577151e-1
00:17:08.254 --> 00:17:09.160
4th Daredevil.

bea54b9b-6687-4565-8dd4-9b3ae4e6151e-0
00:17:09.800 --> 00:17:14.458
I've always loved taking Greek mythology
and turning it on its head,

bea54b9b-6687-4565-8dd4-9b3ae4e6151e-1
00:17:14.458 --> 00:17:18.779
putting the characters into absurd
situations because honestly,

bea54b9b-6687-4565-8dd4-9b3ae4e6151e-2
00:17:18.779 --> 00:17:21.480
they're kind of the original soap opera.

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00:17:21.480 --> 00:17:26.160
At least that's how I viewed it for the
prompt Make the Unsexy Sexy.

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00:17:26.160 --> 00:17:30.746
My mind made its way to Olive Garden and
I cannot tell you the disappointment I

c87c0ba1-adf6-45a6-9092-078761915acb-1
00:17:30.746 --> 00:17:34.760
felt when I found out that Australia
doesn't even have Olive Gardens.

a03b3e93-0afc-44f4-9202-616c52f3ac89-0
00:17:35.480 --> 00:17:39.200
So even though I was worried that this
would mean some of the jokes wouldn't

a03b3e93-0afc-44f4-9202-616c52f3ac89-1
00:17:39.200 --> 00:17:41.472
land,
I really couldn't bring myself to change

a03b3e93-0afc-44f4-9202-616c52f3ac89-2
00:17:41.472 --> 00:17:43.840
it to a different chain like Outback
Steakhouse.

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00:17:44.720 --> 00:17:46.880
So I hope you all enjoy my story.

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00:17:46.880 --> 00:17:48.120
Fork me zaddy.

2c1e0e91-791b-40b9-b45e-d357066e4aed-0
00:17:48.320 --> 00:17:51.280
Though maybe don't eat anything if you're
listening to this.

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00:17:52.960 --> 00:17:55.444
Well,
we forgot to issue that disclaimer before

2134b316-7c78-409b-b06c-5315f88a78cc-1
00:17:55.444 --> 00:17:58.809
we read the story, but no,
you probably shouldn't be eating any,

2134b316-7c78-409b-b06c-5315f88a78cc-2
00:17:58.809 --> 00:18:00.000
you know, Italian food.

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00:18:00.000 --> 00:18:00.600
Why not?

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00:18:00.880 --> 00:18:02.400
Oh, well, maybe it enhances the.

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00:18:02.400 --> 00:18:04.480
I feel like it enhances the experience.

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00:18:04.480 --> 00:18:06.120
But we do know about Olive Garden.

c6b02bf2-cde1-4ca1-b492-156a55360be0-0
00:18:06.120 --> 00:18:09.744
I think as Australians, yeah,
we dispose to American media,

c6b02bf2-cde1-4ca1-b492-156a55360be0-1
00:18:09.744 --> 00:18:13.791
we whether we like it or not,
comms and Olive Garden comes up as a

c6b02bf2-cde1-4ca1-b492-156a55360be0-2
00:18:13.791 --> 00:18:15.120
reference quite often.

77e3490d-85da-46b9-b5ba-53270d795643-0
00:18:15.160 --> 00:18:19.480
So I imagine it to be like a Sizzler type
of situation, but Italian.

4d42b0bc-1395-4f54-8928-0d923b76b3d6-0
00:18:19.480 --> 00:18:19.920
Yeah.

c46e4d3d-e994-4fc6-8bd1-8c9f5dac769e-0
00:18:19.920 --> 00:18:20.720
So Sizzler.

e06b8b23-8ff3-46ac-9945-3e606ec063f3-0
00:18:20.720 --> 00:18:21.960
I don't know if that's a thing over there.

e13319e2-73ce-4458-ab86-55bc8de3fb2c-0
00:18:21.960 --> 00:18:22.520
Probably is.

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00:18:22.520 --> 00:18:22.880
Could be.

315dcddc-48e8-4411-bfc0-4b9592768f0c-0
00:18:23.280 --> 00:18:25.080
It was a thing in the 90s, big time.

5ad94cd7-be22-48a2-8a99-6a83f0d471d7-0
00:18:25.120 --> 00:18:29.452
Basically a main restaurant where it was
all buffet style and you could just have

5ad94cd7-be22-48a2-8a99-6a83f0d471d7-1
00:18:29.452 --> 00:18:32.200
as much as you wanted or you can eat of
everything.

79d0430c-5c35-4af8-8bd3-2743c001980a-0
00:18:32.520 --> 00:18:35.986
That's what I picture as well,
like kind of a cheap family restaurant

79d0430c-5c35-4af8-8bd3-2743c001980a-1
00:18:35.986 --> 00:18:36.680
kind of thing.

bf64c281-0138-48d0-816f-7bd3b0b6c53a-0
00:18:36.880 --> 00:18:39.280
I know it's the kind of place you
wouldn't propose.

d5b4b777-5ca7-48d2-9c58-248ffd034973-0
00:18:39.280 --> 00:18:43.095
I feel like that's like there's a lot of
memes about like dates at Olive Garden,

d5b4b777-5ca7-48d2-9c58-248ffd034973-1
00:18:43.095 --> 00:18:44.320
whether that's acceptable.

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00:18:44.320 --> 00:18:44.680
Do you know?

037f9ee9-f9a1-4f2a-9cf0-14ce18bf5bb1-0
00:18:44.680 --> 00:18:47.080
I once went on a date to the black stump.

a0ba0427-c185-4f39-96d2-fda3f13dcae9-0
00:18:47.200 --> 00:18:48.440
Now that's did you.

5fe5ddab-f75f-4911-b452-4b6667209c04-0
00:18:48.480 --> 00:18:51.040
It's taking us back to the black stump in
Erina.

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00:18:51.120 --> 00:18:52.360
Black stump back bad though.

9b7c0b20-8a80-43a7-a28f-7ad3e444f16d-0
00:18:52.360 --> 00:18:55.264
No,
but and but the reason was because my boy

9b7c0b20-8a80-43a7-a28f-7ad3e444f16d-1
00:18:55.264 --> 00:18:58.800
friend at the time had like a 2 for one
shopper docket.

7f4d6222-9c17-4ddf-a004-295a5b1690c1-0
00:18:59.120 --> 00:18:59.720
Oh, wow.

3eeaee47-1774-46bd-87fc-f25920852109-0
00:18:59.720 --> 00:19:03.560
And you know,
I've never been more romanced in my life.

5489577b-9e9e-428b-93bc-5e42463e7359-0
00:19:03.560 --> 00:19:04.600
And that's sarcasm.

3042ab20-f78a-4adb-965a-287c4fce89a0-0
00:19:04.600 --> 00:19:07.040
If you can't pick up the sarcasm there,
that's sarcasm.

d70f4bb0-13f5-4cb6-8be5-07d27146d050-0
00:19:07.080 --> 00:19:09.680
I mean, to be fair, it was like 17,
so it's fine.

2fee89be-749d-4a7f-96d8-e7cfb428e2ce-0
00:19:09.680 --> 00:19:10.680
But does it really do it?

beb6e9b2-6cc0-44b2-ac16-3c6682295798-0
00:19:10.680 --> 00:19:13.200
I feel like you can't expect that much
when you're 17.

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00:19:13.200 --> 00:19:14.640
No, you know, he was paying.

eaa915cc-4a15-421a-9eca-eaaabf46bc58-0
00:19:14.640 --> 00:19:16.520
I guess he he only paid for himself.

1ccd3ba5-15bf-4af2-8477-f5dcb85639e1-0
00:19:16.520 --> 00:19:17.640
So it worked out well.

b1a8ec6a-4d1d-4975-9278-d4404eff9748-0
00:19:17.960 --> 00:19:18.680
Yeah, that's true.

967edf4f-2338-4cb1-a045-50cddb0fb401-0
00:19:18.720 --> 00:19:19.840
Or maybe he only paid for you.

d93aa211-5606-458f-b7d8-fe22484f2de0-0
00:19:19.840 --> 00:19:22.040
It's still taking perspective, I guess.

61f9115d-e7cb-4a8f-99a8-1fb95d505075-0
00:19:24.680 --> 00:19:28.092
Anyway, all that aside,
I'll tell you right now we're not here to

61f9115d-e7cb-4a8f-99a8-1fb95d505075-1
00:19:28.092 --> 00:19:28.920
talk about your.

790cca98-30be-4384-8fb1-175aef7fef5f-0
00:19:28.920 --> 00:19:31.058
No,
I'll tell you right now it was a very

790cca98-30be-4384-8fb1-175aef7fef5f-1
00:19:31.058 --> 00:19:34.520
different experience that I had to what
went on in this story here.

c0abde13-2869-4694-a679-28bcc89cae99-0
00:19:34.520 --> 00:19:37.480
There's no breadsticks and Alfredo
involved.

98b7e731-e16e-41bf-a940-e0f501b87255-0
00:19:37.480 --> 00:19:38.440
No, thankfully.

994880d8-dbb4-40c5-9569-4a0713cd502f-0
00:19:39.360 --> 00:19:40.400
But yeah, I mean, we do.

3aad6bf6-fa56-46c2-b4a7-577859fe5bba-0
00:19:40.520 --> 00:19:43.425
Like,
does that make this an incest or a faux

3aad6bf6-fa56-46c2-b4a7-577859fe5bba-1
00:19:43.425 --> 00:19:44.120
sest story?

ac3fe635-645e-4463-b885-f65aaf6308f6-0
00:19:44.120 --> 00:19:47.200
Like if we're all family at Olive Garden,
Right.

2d87f553-2a14-445b-9af7-65807f4811b3-0
00:19:47.200 --> 00:19:51.440
OK, so how that works,
I'm not quite sure how that.

17e1eab3-729f-4e56-b07c-9aa77a019d56-0
00:19:51.440 --> 00:19:53.712
Well,
all the Greek gods are kind of in

17e1eab3-729f-4e56-b07c-9aa77a019d56-1
00:19:53.712 --> 00:19:54.280
incestual.

9d28e266-8b3d-4bae-9d77-ae6646c55bdc-0
00:19:54.600 --> 00:19:54.880
True.

67662c69-3fc7-4f72-8c03-b7aa99680fc6-0
00:19:55.160 --> 00:19:56.120
Yeah, to some extent.

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00:19:56.120 --> 00:19:56.440
So.

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00:19:56.840 --> 00:19:57.560
So it's all fine.

ebf4f4c2-1c68-4c9c-a8a3-d5ae8296231f-0
00:19:57.560 --> 00:19:58.280
So we're all family.

654bde05-52d9-42e2-a482-b06cecf3e3c4-0
00:19:58.280 --> 00:20:00.280
2 layers, double layers of incest here.

64e1c341-0b60-4850-b009-0966858406d2-0
00:20:01.880 --> 00:20:04.440
So this is Lucas, our third bare devil.

d67991ed-66fc-4809-aa4d-3231dababd6c-0
00:20:04.680 --> 00:20:09.794
And all three bare devils have either
featured in the long list or the podium

d67991ed-66fc-4809-aa4d-3231dababd6c-1
00:20:09.794 --> 00:20:11.040
or come damn close.

816a467c-33cd-4935-b3c9-865f4475e201-0
00:20:11.040 --> 00:20:12.280
And this is no exception.

b8ff03a0-23f2-4a3c-9dd3-feaeb8048237-0
00:20:12.560 --> 00:20:16.040
Fork me Zaddy has those words on it cut
because we.

bf5f3c12-cd08-4593-840f-f5d20f96a712-0
00:20:16.040 --> 00:20:17.400
Well, that's one word, but yeah.

cdc3fb19-468e-409d-9a51-1a53ba52a239-0
00:20:18.840 --> 00:20:20.280
You're in that mood now, aren't you?

bc2f3b87-16fd-4937-805d-914def37a6ea-0
00:20:20.480 --> 00:20:26.240
Have you to drink, You're belligerent,
You're looking for someone to abuse.

04772518-ef97-4e20-bd71-ee8bda645f53-0
00:20:26.240 --> 00:20:26.960
And here I am.

3278bfa5-b874-4670-9da5-808c518ed868-0
00:20:26.960 --> 00:20:27.200
Yeah.

01ee09e9-e647-4b45-a486-f2d6e23d59c0-0
00:20:27.560 --> 00:20:27.920
Hi.

1d844026-54fb-4ee5-be63-ed1c16fe82f5-0
00:20:30.280 --> 00:20:33.453
It has that word cut,
which means that we wanted to put this,

1d844026-54fb-4ee5-be63-ed1c16fe82f5-1
00:20:33.453 --> 00:20:35.961
desperately wanted to put this on the
long list,

1d844026-54fb-4ee5-be63-ed1c16fe82f5-2
00:20:35.961 --> 00:20:37.600
but there was only a few spaces.

f09c569f-1c58-4f09-a27c-e7b9ebefb145-0
00:20:37.600 --> 00:20:41.200
And comedy,
****** comedy was the largest category.

e1e7b142-aa26-4a10-8ede-b65c920b3409-0
00:20:41.720 --> 00:20:44.000
Most entries really hard to make it on
there.

55b4b520-7a07-4d01-99e3-48f25bd10a94-0
00:20:44.000 --> 00:20:46.800
We wanted to put this on there,
but and I guess that's decisions.

95daa60c-52a8-4047-a179-18e073edc6b3-0
00:20:46.840 --> 00:20:49.240
That's what's interesting in these
bedevil episodes.

a9c9162f-612f-43ad-b0e6-eb98fe625ea1-0
00:20:49.240 --> 00:20:51.400
It's like if I didn't long list,
like why not?

8482009a-f48b-4653-bd85-3ee5b2d3688a-0
00:20:51.400 --> 00:20:51.960
Like what?

de9085a1-d925-415b-b6d5-b71d1808210f-0
00:20:51.960 --> 00:20:54.120
What was it about my story that didn't
get me there?

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00:20:54.120 --> 00:20:55.200
And we loved this story.

bfea4ca8-80ce-451b-9233-5e9410c8b22e-0
00:20:55.200 --> 00:20:57.680
So why did a story that we loved not make
it?

7771e33e-b4f5-4640-a4ca-55dbac1bf86c-0
00:20:57.680 --> 00:21:00.240
And,
and I guess that's what we hope to

7771e33e-b4f5-4640-a4ca-55dbac1bf86c-1
00:21:00.240 --> 00:21:00.880
demystify.

7a32bd93-bdc3-4c02-80bf-04f7e69d4958-0
00:21:00.880 --> 00:21:05.272
I will say already though that we did
market in our notes as publishing quality,

7a32bd93-bdc3-4c02-80bf-04f7e69d4958-1
00:21:05.272 --> 00:21:08.200
which meant that we wanted to share it
with everyone.

7893e588-b3fc-4867-ba66-8e4b0fa54648-0
00:21:08.200 --> 00:21:13.120
So it was by no means like this is a ****
story when it doesn't make the long list.

9e7ca2f6-a088-4622-b50e-876de656e989-0
00:21:13.120 --> 00:21:16.604
And I think that's worth remembering here
because there'd be a lot of listeners,

9e7ca2f6-a088-4622-b50e-876de656e989-1
00:21:16.604 --> 00:21:17.680
I hope listening to that.

d99bb919-c856-426b-a270-c62d34880278-0
00:21:17.680 --> 00:21:18.920
Hopefully I've done it justice.

e9b73671-d558-46b7-8ccc-9543cf378f7c-0
00:21:18.920 --> 00:21:22.375
But like laughing,
thinking this is bloody grey piece of

e9b73671-d558-46b7-8ccc-9543cf378f7c-1
00:21:22.375 --> 00:21:22.800
comedy.

c96043d4-1584-4968-bfe3-48b07df50f65-0
00:21:23.240 --> 00:21:24.040
And I agree.

1fa860fd-9590-4c1b-bb6d-b86bc7a150ea-0
00:21:24.040 --> 00:21:26.160
So I guess that's the point, right?

9830822f-db9e-4578-8198-b26f3a684e1c-0
00:21:26.160 --> 00:21:30.160
Like you're among good company when you
don't make the long list.

b4b5fd9b-7df1-45db-9465-ed37ebda58c8-0
00:21:30.440 --> 00:21:31.760
But anyway, let's get into that.

b73349fb-3751-43b8-90e9-4c45ba056145-0
00:21:31.760 --> 00:21:36.920
Let's have a deep dive, as you say,
into what sets this story apart.

f324c077-926b-4190-8a84-539080bef996-0
00:21:37.200 --> 00:21:39.652
Well,
just speaking at a kind of a higher level,

f324c077-926b-4190-8a84-539080bef996-1
00:21:39.652 --> 00:21:42.706
what we often talk about is kind of the
element of surprise,

f324c077-926b-4190-8a84-539080bef996-2
00:21:42.706 --> 00:21:46.159
something that is out of left field that
makes your story stand out.

d47090f6-462b-440b-aaf9-907ca8afe5f2-0
00:21:46.600 --> 00:21:49.720
And here's a story that stands out on its
premise.

528689b0-899d-441f-a719-e41ed4ea7b45-0
00:21:49.720 --> 00:21:55.653
Like, this is not, you could have 1,000,
000 monkeys typing at the typewriters and

528689b0-899d-441f-a719-e41ed4ea7b45-1
00:21:55.653 --> 00:22:00.800
none of them will come up with the Greek
gods and Olive Garden and sex.

fa23820d-5cba-41cb-8995-c592e91258e3-0
00:22:00.840 --> 00:22:02.840
Yeah, that takes the Holy Sadowski,
that one.

7fa6ffcf-a219-499a-bd70-b6fd330ecc86-0
00:22:02.880 --> 00:22:04.360
But all those elements work together.

7f62337c-b774-4db3-b718-6451f0b9fe8c-0
00:22:04.360 --> 00:22:07.740
I mean,
the surprise of the God having his realm,

7f62337c-b774-4db3-b718-6451f0b9fe8c-1
00:22:07.740 --> 00:22:10.040
his temple being the Olive Garden.

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00:22:10.160 --> 00:22:10.920
And it's fitting.

6f6c14e2-c839-47b5-9909-12a088a5a8d7-0
00:22:10.920 --> 00:22:14.460
And, you know,
the way that the story pans out as well,

6f6c14e2-c839-47b5-9909-12a088a5a8d7-1
00:22:14.460 --> 00:22:18.063
We have the protagonist here who is
initially reluctant,

6f6c14e2-c839-47b5-9909-12a088a5a8d7-2
00:22:18.063 --> 00:22:21.920
but once she gets a taste of that Alfredo,
she comes around.

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00:22:22.880 --> 00:22:25.520
I think it's clearly expressed that he's
pretty hard as well.

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00:22:25.640 --> 00:22:25.800
Yeah.

2bba16af-1a39-472a-91fc-13188aba31ce-0
00:22:25.800 --> 00:22:27.800
I think that's a factor that plays into
it.

121e3d5b-20e7-4091-af14-a5acc1d89204-0
00:22:28.080 --> 00:22:30.120
But you say it's all working well
together.

2ed6ed0a-5af1-4ca8-982d-cfcf8250beb6-0
00:22:30.120 --> 00:22:32.880
And I'm going to get straight into
critique territory.

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00:22:33.000 --> 00:22:33.200
Yeah.

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00:22:33.200 --> 00:22:37.120
Because I have one overarching issue.

8da9a8aa-ac4f-4633-a689-5f428bac589d-0
00:22:37.520 --> 00:22:39.560
Is it, is it the Greek Italian thing?

c7a3bb58-c96d-4e56-a40c-dc489bcd542e-0
00:22:39.560 --> 00:22:40.040
Yes.

36587f67-561b-43de-8026-8c91578e421f-0
00:22:40.040 --> 00:22:41.280
Yeah, that's the one.

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00:22:41.480 --> 00:22:42.000
Yeah.

6a125e0b-d8b9-48fc-96c2-65baf9180ed6-0
00:22:42.000 --> 00:22:44.760
Like,
we've got Greek gods and an Italian

6a125e0b-d8b9-48fc-96c2-65baf9180ed6-1
00:22:44.760 --> 00:22:48.111
restaurant,
and there is something in that that my

6a125e0b-d8b9-48fc-96c2-65baf9180ed6-2
00:22:48.111 --> 00:22:49.360
brain doesn't like.

9879a755-9932-4682-a255-cf9cabb3d329-0
00:22:49.800 --> 00:22:50.800
You know, it's fine.

8eebc6d2-4b13-4189-868c-73f8407c3372-0
00:22:50.800 --> 00:22:55.080
We can suspend that and enjoy this story
and it's plenty funny and there's no need

8eebc6d2-4b13-4189-868c-73f8407c3372-1
00:22:55.080 --> 00:22:57.040
to go down that path and get nitpicky.

8e29605e-1d0b-4c8b-a887-912491221f57-0
00:22:57.040 --> 00:23:01.148
But there is a part of my brain that is
picking that knit and finding it

8e29605e-1d0b-4c8b-a887-912491221f57-1
00:23:01.148 --> 00:23:01.880
unsatisfying.

e7d99965-e082-4bba-a505-17da53d6ea0f-0
00:23:01.920 --> 00:23:05.484
I don't think that's what would stand
between this story and a long listing,

e7d99965-e082-4bba-a505-17da53d6ea0f-1
00:23:05.484 --> 00:23:06.040
for example.

e22c8381-c721-4c25-b459-efd704ce8ea8-0
00:23:06.040 --> 00:23:07.880
But I think it it's worth considering.

34e34a9a-e1d9-41ae-8053-9ea0fb8fa6d2-0
00:23:07.880 --> 00:23:10.840
I mean, we do have Roman gods as well,
and they're the same ones.

4202db6c-92d4-4677-be34-d6727ca62e1a-0
00:23:10.920 --> 00:23:11.360
Yeah.

40aabfd3-cbfb-4819-9eb5-dbc5b0a94ccb-0
00:23:11.360 --> 00:23:11.760
Really.

a993bea6-d7c2-4d7e-b317-bda5c3b386d8-0
00:23:11.760 --> 00:23:15.680
So I feel like for me, that's an issue,
But I don't know.

113ac7ef-9146-4a2d-8dcc-85ae087ba988-0
00:23:15.680 --> 00:23:16.520
You picked it, too.

5a9c52cd-cf0d-4e65-87c9-eebdd3b6c750-0
00:23:16.520 --> 00:23:17.280
Like, you guessed.

e69f6912-423a-4934-9f4b-8eb581e9bba1-0
00:23:17.280 --> 00:23:17.560
Yeah.

5f3ed23c-9a00-414e-a871-cd7616b27338-0
00:23:17.560 --> 00:23:21.800
Like, I have to say, reading the story,
it didn't really Take Me Out of it.

b9d0c5ac-24d5-4c4b-b24d-59fa4699928c-0
00:23:21.800 --> 00:23:22.280
No.

78023a1e-8ff2-422e-8bd5-0a779feb5e16-0
00:23:22.320 --> 00:23:25.289
Because really,
if it's Roman versus Italian,

78023a1e-8ff2-422e-8bd5-0a779feb5e16-1
00:23:25.289 --> 00:23:30.000
that also doesn't quite, you know,
exactly match up like Rome and Italy,

78023a1e-8ff2-422e-8bd5-0a779feb5e16-2
00:23:30.000 --> 00:23:33.680
modern Italian cuisine as opposed to
ancient Roman gods.

40c9afe9-db9f-4c68-a0b8-f0f16bc06cc4-0
00:23:33.680 --> 00:23:36.680
It's also not the same thing, you know,
but geographically it is.

c73e5e3d-9409-4113-842a-53cc50bc3371-0
00:23:36.680 --> 00:23:38.472
But culturally and, you know,
in time period,

c73e5e3d-9409-4113-842a-53cc50bc3371-1
00:23:38.472 --> 00:23:39.720
it's not exactly the same thing.

5b160a2b-c730-42db-af85-31ecadef9453-0
00:23:39.720 --> 00:23:42.040
So I think you can accept a little bit of
a stretch.

93b0f4aa-344d-41bd-9378-92768a5ba102-0
00:23:42.080 --> 00:23:44.120
You're going to accept a stretch in One
Direction.

2f744914-f5ba-44d6-badc-35c478b6f244-0
00:23:44.120 --> 00:23:45.920
You're going to accept it in another
direction.

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00:23:46.200 --> 00:23:46.880
Pay the job.

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00:23:47.560 --> 00:23:47.760
Yeah.

15e4bf94-597f-4d0b-97db-af771481b54b-0
00:23:52.480 --> 00:23:53.640
Oh, man, reject it.

d9c883eb-0363-4c32-b050-a8b212856938-0
00:23:53.680 --> 00:23:57.440
Oh, and again, come on, you can do it.

5bf5a749-09d1-452b-ba54-93637500cd4f-0
00:23:57.800 --> 00:23:58.720
Go on, sweetie.

ef244c95-0ba6-4907-ab26-fe2c2df4f790-0
00:24:01.640 --> 00:24:02.720
OK, there we go.

04584906-969b-4a12-9dad-0bf4e9ee58d7-0
00:24:03.360 --> 00:24:04.440
Third time's a charm.

b77c21f4-0cd5-4d1c-9ad7-ab00fa86fa90-0
00:24:05.480 --> 00:24:06.400
You know, you're right.

c5745556-bacf-4ec1-b13d-c823504d5eb4-0
00:24:06.400 --> 00:24:10.366
We can we can suspend our disbelief or
our nitpicking brains on that,

c5745556-bacf-4ec1-b13d-c823504d5eb4-1
00:24:10.366 --> 00:24:11.840
but it's worth mentioning.

af5ad9ee-55e4-4479-9133-130f4b73923f-0
00:24:11.840 --> 00:24:13.360
Yeah, No, but that's right.

ab454135-5cf1-4b95-a751-e96d1430d1c8-0
00:24:13.360 --> 00:24:15.455
I mean,
the stronger you can make that connection,

ab454135-5cf1-4b95-a751-e96d1430d1c8-1
00:24:15.455 --> 00:24:16.360
the better it becomes.

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00:24:16.360 --> 00:24:16.880
I guess.

d7f97510-b2ad-4f70-acee-968e73707a42-0
00:24:16.880 --> 00:24:17.240
Yeah.

0a17a218-5d07-4ff6-b7b2-8e8c4bb89bf4-0
00:24:17.680 --> 00:24:19.660
So let's talk about the title for a
moment,

0a17a218-5d07-4ff6-b7b2-8e8c4bb89bf4-1
00:24:19.660 --> 00:24:22.360
because this is another example of a
title that stands out.

dc32f611-f00d-42a9-8aed-03e64938d9c3-0
00:24:22.360 --> 00:24:23.200
It works.

582c02ce-2380-4a9c-ad7c-c787595d6245-0
00:24:23.560 --> 00:24:24.320
Fork me.

19a32c95-ea70-4ed8-b6d5-cf97ca0ff4d4-0
00:24:24.320 --> 00:24:25.480
We're talking about forks.

5ece81ca-a157-4a5e-bd95-50e9d3e79766-0
00:24:25.600 --> 00:24:26.800
We're talking about Olive Garden.

0030bd2f-7c45-465d-bc33-ef422beab6dc-0
00:24:26.800 --> 00:24:29.040
We're talking about having a lovely
dinner together.

cb9bc9c9-b75c-4516-868d-8e83cbc45d96-0
00:24:29.680 --> 00:24:30.800
Oh, is that what we were talking about?

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00:24:30.800 --> 00:24:32.160
Lovely dinner, lovely dinner.

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00:24:32.280 --> 00:24:32.600
All right.

40cf09e7-ae41-406f-823b-4baa977cdec8-0
00:24:32.600 --> 00:24:36.578
And Zaddy,
there's a word that you introduced me to

40cf09e7-ae41-406f-823b-4baa977cdec8-1
00:24:36.578 --> 00:24:40.480
back in the day,
back in episode 4 of the podcast.

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00:24:40.480 --> 00:24:42.120
It was four or five.

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00:24:42.120 --> 00:24:45.509
I currently which one it was in the
context of, what's his name,

144631b6-60ca-4dcb-99b5-c7c274224006-1
00:24:45.509 --> 00:24:46.240
Jimmy Stewart.

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00:24:46.240 --> 00:24:46.960
Jimmy Stewart.

fcfd835c-5532-4147-9879-5e6edb3d5646-0
00:24:47.160 --> 00:24:49.160
So going to my happy place right now.

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00:24:49.360 --> 00:24:49.480
Yes.

0398af87-5081-40a0-b919-30f5dbf0d7d9-0
00:24:51.280 --> 00:24:52.760
So Holly's leaned into that as well.

cdf2b06f-1fcc-4d5f-a0dc-4472059a4bc4-0
00:24:52.760 --> 00:24:54.200
So that's lovely and memorable.

bfa71ff9-0a52-42ed-b73c-8915d00410f9-0
00:24:54.200 --> 00:24:58.400
Title recalls the story,
his creative twist, all of those things.

6e3a2a2c-de42-4c26-9179-82cc4743f5ab-0
00:24:58.400 --> 00:25:00.960
It's got a comedic tone,
which fits the story.

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00:25:00.960 --> 00:25:01.120
Yeah.

6025f4fd-2f9c-4fc3-afb9-6286b8b0d565-0
00:25:01.120 --> 00:25:01.520
You don't.

714ff63e-776c-4764-8b3d-2502dd2cc6b7-0
00:25:01.520 --> 00:25:02.480
You don't title your story.

6fec748d-cc49-41d0-90ea-58a5d5cab1f4-0
00:25:02.480 --> 00:25:03.160
Fork me Zaddy.

8b231880-a684-4ff2-b4c4-c48d149147a8-0
00:25:03.160 --> 00:25:05.480
And then it's about grief and loss.

fab0c738-fbce-4704-9ab5-afa62bb11aa1-0
00:25:06.120 --> 00:25:09.680
So well done on getting the tone right on
that one.

14da7f36-c3c0-4560-b5b5-0a3030abdd2f-0
00:25:10.120 --> 00:25:13.000
So should we get into the words
themselves?

57c4f191-7bda-4619-953a-f00ece1d0938-0
00:25:13.000 --> 00:25:15.275
And of course,
we're not going to go line by line

57c4f191-7bda-4619-953a-f00ece1d0938-1
00:25:15.275 --> 00:25:16.960
because there are way too many lines.

a64a1c59-c9b6-455c-a522-0f95f6822287-0
00:25:17.360 --> 00:25:20.590
But starting with the opening,
when I was a teenager,

a64a1c59-c9b6-455c-a522-0f95f6822287-1
00:25:20.590 --> 00:25:24.000
I had posters of demigods plastered on my
bedroom walls.

0db3a1d4-9adf-4f7d-9401-b64062a93962-0
00:25:24.560 --> 00:25:29.932
And I have to say, first reading of this,
the posters on the walls made me think

0db3a1d4-9adf-4f7d-9401-b64062a93962-1
00:25:29.932 --> 00:25:32.320
like modern, like not ancient Greek.

318cea2f-f217-4b8d-9187-40db270a4327-0
00:25:32.520 --> 00:25:36.072
And this is a weird situation where
they're Greek gods in the modern day,

318cea2f-f217-4b8d-9187-40db270a4327-1
00:25:36.072 --> 00:25:36.360
right?

fcd2b7b2-7ead-494d-834b-ca26d7dc392f-0
00:25:36.720 --> 00:25:40.740
But took a little bit of time for me to
kind of understand where that line was in

fcd2b7b2-7ead-494d-834b-ca26d7dc392f-1
00:25:40.740 --> 00:25:41.280
this story.

5e100d08-66d5-4723-bdca-779f845cee05-0
00:25:41.280 --> 00:25:44.360
It didn't really immediately drop me into,
oh, I get it.

e22da1a3-7689-4e60-9499-1fe282d92535-0
00:25:44.360 --> 00:25:45.320
I'm a teenager.

5d498147-5726-469c-b98e-3ab6cf638df6-0
00:25:45.680 --> 00:25:50.691
I'm a also a in this pantheon of Greek
gods and also it's modern times and

5d498147-5726-469c-b98e-3ab6cf638df6-1
00:25:50.691 --> 00:25:56.036
there's an Olive Garden kind of took a
little bit to workout where all of those

5d498147-5726-469c-b98e-3ab6cf638df6-2
00:25:56.036 --> 00:25:57.439
pieces came together.

cc60e4d0-f3da-4505-b97f-e3805511d840-0
00:25:57.640 --> 00:25:58.160
I agree.

43ab6284-7d56-4db9-b3e4-76f2ed0b9b38-0
00:25:58.160 --> 00:26:02.883
And it's kind of hard to remember back
now because it's that first impression

43ab6284-7d56-4db9-b3e4-76f2ed0b9b38-1
00:26:02.883 --> 00:26:04.640
thing that you only get once.

9f0f7e40-ad3c-4f9e-aded-f4f0810e0047-0
00:26:04.960 --> 00:26:09.040
And I agree, now that you bring it up,
I was a little bit lost in this opening.

fc500828-597e-4ac4-8060-b5460784151f-0
00:26:09.040 --> 00:26:13.200
I didn't have that clarity that we talk
about when you say drop us into the scene.

e6d326dc-b671-49ab-8862-abfa7ffad75e-0
00:26:13.200 --> 00:26:17.641
I think the elements are there,
but it's a lot for a reader to kind of

e6d326dc-b671-49ab-8862-abfa7ffad75e-1
00:26:17.641 --> 00:26:19.080
figure out all at once.

a4aac6fc-a55a-4744-872d-82aeff3c46f7-0
00:26:19.080 --> 00:26:23.520
And so there may have been maybe just a
tiny bit more hand holding required there.

0958589b-e163-4570-b452-16ccc40bc1a4-0
00:26:23.520 --> 00:26:27.490
It's not an issue now when we go back and
read it again because we know what's

0958589b-e163-4570-b452-16ccc40bc1a4-1
00:26:27.490 --> 00:26:29.200
going on and we picture the scene.

cdc8a26e-b223-4d2e-9ada-94b893573bb8-0
00:26:29.560 --> 00:26:33.720
But yes, certainly on that first reading,
we're a little bit lost for that opening.

cbde5551-ec67-4402-8bf8-5e67aad8ddbd-0
00:26:34.040 --> 00:26:36.120
I don't know how you would solve that
necessarily.

0811e24e-a91e-4fa6-ad76-47cd235c131e-0
00:26:36.120 --> 00:26:39.720
I mean, I think it's a good combination,
the posters and the gods.

8149559b-34cc-4d82-86af-8ec78e63ec50-0
00:26:39.720 --> 00:26:43.941
I think that does bring that ancient
Greek in the modern day and and make it

8149559b-34cc-4d82-86af-8ec78e63ec50-1
00:26:43.941 --> 00:26:46.080
relatable to as as like a modern story.

eabebe27-0dcb-4c91-9336-c0e282a36e42-0
00:26:46.320 --> 00:26:47.680
So I think that works.

6ca6393c-0fba-4916-be51-5f43ba5c5a8e-0
00:26:47.680 --> 00:26:52.406
It's more about maybe just pretty much
straight up saying I'm a demigod and it

6ca6393c-0fba-4916-be51-5f43ba5c5a8e-1
00:26:52.406 --> 00:26:54.560
it does, but maybe not quick enough.

b3732e0e-0113-4870-a526-e5800242dd8d-0
00:26:54.560 --> 00:26:57.240
Like we probably need to set that up just
a little bit more clearly.

6a6697a5-28f2-46ee-9e25-a99bb8a5d71c-0
00:26:57.240 --> 00:27:00.152
Yeah,
it is really hard to think what comes

6a6697a5-28f2-46ee-9e25-a99bb8a5d71c-1
00:27:00.152 --> 00:27:00.880
first here.

a5d7c67a-ccad-4e96-bcb5-9e6800f6100d-0
00:27:00.880 --> 00:27:04.676
I think Holly's done a good job of at
least in a couple of paragraphs,

a5d7c67a-ccad-4e96-bcb5-9e6800f6100d-1
00:27:04.676 --> 00:27:05.800
bringing all that in.

1a05429f-d10e-491e-98a5-11ff6660990f-0
00:27:05.840 --> 00:27:09.000
So as it goes on,
we kind of develop that picture.

0216d7b8-6e79-4cd9-9f7d-7231f5d2e652-0
00:27:09.080 --> 00:27:12.640
There may be some opportunities around
where the story has started.

9dc8136f-454c-429e-8c61-4b20f63bd7da-0
00:27:12.640 --> 00:27:16.691
I think like we have this little section
when when I was a teenager and kind of

9dc8136f-454c-429e-8c61-4b20f63bd7da-1
00:27:16.691 --> 00:27:20.440
there is a bit of back story in the
introduction of the sister character.

39146129-849c-474a-b0e8-9c0118b1e588-0
00:27:20.800 --> 00:27:25.289
I don't know how much of that needs to be
in there really to sell the story because

39146129-849c-474a-b0e8-9c0118b1e588-1
00:27:25.289 --> 00:27:27.320
the story takes place at Olive Garden.

6348f145-0e8a-4333-aa48-79908fd7fca4-0
00:27:27.320 --> 00:27:31.959
So there is a possibility there of, like,
starting it with standing before the

6348f145-0e8a-4333-aa48-79908fd7fca4-1
00:27:31.959 --> 00:27:34.896
mirror,
getting ready for my date and that moment

6348f145-0e8a-4333-aa48-79908fd7fca4-2
00:27:34.896 --> 00:27:39.360
as we kind of lead into the date and then
having the back story fill us in.

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00:27:39.680 --> 00:27:40.160
Yeah.

b7689b5a-eb90-4936-9d8a-0d77359e128d-0
00:27:40.160 --> 00:27:42.669
And look,
I don't mind that it starts because I

b7689b5a-eb90-4936-9d8a-0d77359e128d-1
00:27:42.669 --> 00:27:44.760
think we have that return of the sister.

5b9830cf-ea1b-4764-9b92-5edd7efa84b2-0
00:27:44.760 --> 00:27:46.560
It's not like it's a throwaway moment.

32b153eb-7696-404d-98c0-a5c2ec1ed865-0
00:27:46.560 --> 00:27:47.640
It is part of it.

afd299e1-8cdb-4c80-9072-7ac4fca995da-0
00:27:47.640 --> 00:27:51.057
This idea of family,
this idea of gods and demigods and her

afd299e1-8cdb-4c80-9072-7ac4fca995da-1
00:27:51.057 --> 00:27:54.760
sense of self worth and all of that is
wrapped up in that scene.

3f7dc80a-e6ad-42f3-9078-9f3d97d62604-0
00:27:54.760 --> 00:27:58.627
And you could move it,
but I don't think you can cut straight to

3f7dc80a-e6ad-42f3-9078-9f3d97d62604-1
00:27:58.627 --> 00:27:59.520
here's my date.

aeadccde-8238-46d7-b8cd-3ce05293a629-0
00:27:59.760 --> 00:28:04.917
I think you need that emotional set up of
like I lack self confidence and what kind

aeadccde-8238-46d7-b8cd-3ce05293a629-1
00:28:04.917 --> 00:28:10.013
of dodgy God am I going to end U with and
all of that to really sell the comedy as

aeadccde-8238-46d7-b8cd-3ce05293a629-2
00:28:10.013 --> 00:28:10.320
well.

52104404-a5a9-4ce0-877f-6d73dc2163a3-0
00:28:10.640 --> 00:28:14.788
And Holly does pay that off right in the
closing lines as well to just close that

52104404-a5a9-4ce0-877f-6d73dc2163a3-1
00:28:14.788 --> 00:28:15.800
circle of the story.

7bf08bff-4158-4e69-bd5c-dfa4e0c253bf-0
00:28:15.800 --> 00:28:18.000
So I wouldn't say lose it.

5c737129-1e4b-46d8-8e7e-5c9817d37541-0
00:28:18.000 --> 00:28:21.120
It's just a case of finessing it so that
it's clear.

354191ff-89c7-46ea-ae0f-2eaa0f16e8d1-0
00:28:21.200 --> 00:28:24.069
So look,
there are a few instances here which I'd

354191ff-89c7-46ea-ae0f-2eaa0f16e8d1-1
00:28:24.069 --> 00:28:27.800
like to get your opinion on,
a few instances of flooded panties.

5907cb9e-fa76-495b-8374-1b20bf72e1b3-0
00:28:28.120 --> 00:28:30.600
What are your thoughts about that in this
story or in this story?

bf7e1686-1556-4ac2-b8db-719d7b41f650-0
00:28:30.680 --> 00:28:33.920
I open the door and my panties
immediately flood at the site.

d1004a0a-663c-4cde-9533-bacc4309d777-0
00:28:33.920 --> 00:28:37.455
And then later on there's a bit of a what
are the what's the word,

d1004a0a-663c-4cde-9533-bacc4309d777-1
00:28:37.455 --> 00:28:38.880
a sploosh that takes place.

b1fd6504-7388-4533-83d8-dfdff7c0d51b-0
00:28:39.720 --> 00:28:44.615
I guess I will say that the line my
panties immediately flooded the site was

b1fd6504-7388-4533-83d8-dfdff7c0d51b-1
00:28:44.615 --> 00:28:45.760
a bit much for me.

931273e6-c409-4e99-84be-0f610b4115e9-0
00:28:45.760 --> 00:28:49.128
Like it was kind of,
it took me out of the moment in the sense

931273e6-c409-4e99-84be-0f610b4115e9-1
00:28:49.128 --> 00:28:51.160
that it was a bit too overly dramatic.

e8057469-7557-4caa-a89d-ee00791c76ca-0
00:28:51.320 --> 00:28:51.640
Yeah.

7c013208-f5d7-43e0-b220-a06559da07ab-0
00:28:51.720 --> 00:28:54.078
I mean,
I guess it's just a tongue in cheek kind

7c013208-f5d7-43e0-b220-a06559da07ab-1
00:28:54.078 --> 00:28:57.640
of thing that you might say like, wow,
this guy had such an impact on me.

8ff65eca-fb90-4396-bd40-5b03485a30be-0
00:28:58.120 --> 00:29:00.640
But it's not said in that kind of
sarcastic way.

da6e5359-4e8d-47a8-961a-87373b8820c4-0
00:29:00.640 --> 00:29:02.880
It's stated like as if it actually
happened.

824c3d9c-f0f4-4f6e-aece-41dbcd554e03-0
00:29:02.880 --> 00:29:04.920
And I think for me,
that was a little bit jarring.

3bad442b-40f4-46d3-810f-0c3c752473e0-0
00:29:04.920 --> 00:29:06.640
But I don't know why you had a different.

48642ae7-1691-454b-ad35-1c95b4d510dd-0
00:29:06.640 --> 00:29:08.880
No, you like, liked it.

a38ac6e6-0f97-42f2-9d3c-826cef3cbe98-0
00:29:09.160 --> 00:29:11.031
No,
I was just so interested to see what your

a38ac6e6-0f97-42f2-9d3c-826cef3cbe98-1
00:29:11.031 --> 00:29:11.560
thoughts are.

94f0e6f6-dbc8-4bd5-85a6-c4cb1e414076-0
00:29:11.560 --> 00:29:13.840
I mean, this is a comedic story, right?

f4059bec-eb5b-41c5-bdb4-c04a80722f87-0
00:29:14.280 --> 00:29:19.405
And the tone is lighthearted,
but also there's a sex scene that happens

f4059bec-eb5b-41c5-bdb4-c04a80722f87-1
00:29:19.405 --> 00:29:22.040
and you have to make it sexy as well.

1ea7dc40-b1df-46bb-a196-22fd990f3eb9-0
00:29:22.040 --> 00:29:22.320
Yeah.

fa572fc4-24ba-4cbc-8b19-ac027d820483-0
00:29:22.320 --> 00:29:25.061
I mean,
and even just as if you're going to keep

fa572fc4-24ba-4cbc-8b19-ac027d820483-1
00:29:25.061 --> 00:29:29.088
the comedic tone like a a simple change
might be to just ditch the word

fa572fc4-24ba-4cbc-8b19-ac027d820483-2
00:29:29.088 --> 00:29:29.760
immediately.

f699efa9-be95-49bc-8f25-f7eff98e6c9b-0
00:29:30.240 --> 00:29:33.832
I don't know what it is,
but I think that that word is making it,

f699efa9-be95-49bc-8f25-f7eff98e6c9b-1
00:29:33.832 --> 00:29:36.172
yeah,
more difficult to see this as just a

f699efa9-be95-49bc-8f25-f7eff98e6c9b-2
00:29:36.172 --> 00:29:40.581
sarcastic kind of over the top comment
because it's sort of making it a bit more

f699efa9-be95-49bc-8f25-f7eff98e6c9b-3
00:29:40.581 --> 00:29:42.160
literal, if that makes sense.

09315f96-cf1f-4fd7-9c19-7e4c5da551ff-0
00:29:42.640 --> 00:29:45.510
One thing,
and I say this just as someone who reads

09315f96-cf1f-4fd7-9c19-7e4c5da551ff-1
00:29:45.510 --> 00:29:49.650
and critiques a lot of stories,
so it's not like a thing that's a problem,

09315f96-cf1f-4fd7-9c19-7e4c5da551ff-2
00:29:49.650 --> 00:29:53.790
but it's just a thing that I notice,
is this scene where she's standing in

09315f96-cf1f-4fd7-9c19-7e4c5da551ff-3
00:29:53.790 --> 00:29:56.440
front of the mirror sort of looking at
herself.

57a43674-5e29-45f4-918d-5b6b2f5e95df-0
00:29:57.000 --> 00:30:01.101
And the whole standing in front of a
mirror looking at your own appearance is

57a43674-5e29-45f4-918d-5b6b2f5e95df-1
00:30:01.101 --> 00:30:03.520
a bit of a trope,
bit of a cliche in stories.

719a47b4-311a-4e49-afce-365a2c57c7d9-0
00:30:03.520 --> 00:30:07.445
And it does serve a purpose where you get
to describe your own appearance in a way

719a47b4-311a-4e49-afce-365a2c57c7d9-1
00:30:07.445 --> 00:30:11.134
that you wouldn't normally get to do in a
story because you're not looking at

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00:30:11.134 --> 00:30:11.560
yourself.

b025f184-045a-4af7-b844-ca1f5d979cc8-0
00:30:11.920 --> 00:30:15.963
So sometimes it has value,
but I would sort of say it kind of

b025f184-045a-4af7-b844-ca1f5d979cc8-1
00:30:15.963 --> 00:30:19.160
triggers me as someone who notices these
things.

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00:30:19.160 --> 00:30:20.520
And I don't think you need the mirror.

d7303ee4-5870-42f4-aff8-54fc10b622b1-0
00:30:20.920 --> 00:30:25.468
I think she can just still compare
herself to her sister in her mind because

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00:30:25.468 --> 00:30:27.240
she knows what she looks like.

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00:30:27.280 --> 00:30:28.640
Yeah, she can remember that.

8751919a-4104-4335-b30c-dfff54b72a86-0
00:30:28.640 --> 00:30:31.040
And so we can still get that information
without the mirror.

6e3ddd93-df19-40eb-86f6-81a7b82bea9b-0
00:30:31.400 --> 00:30:33.571
And look,
I don't know that you need to get rid of

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00:30:33.571 --> 00:30:34.040
the mirror.

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00:30:34.040 --> 00:30:35.520
That's that's a me thing.

f070cd2a-a74b-4f22-9d70-e2fe6fab7e2d-0
00:30:35.520 --> 00:30:36.880
But I know I'm not the only one.

7256cbb4-0075-41bb-a8c2-f450e479bb82-0
00:30:36.880 --> 00:30:41.920
I know that mirrors in fiction are a bit
of a like a overdone kind of thing.

c3b8db88-52f3-45a4-9869-0d578bd6bc8e-0
00:30:41.920 --> 00:30:45.640
So I would just tell you that, you know,
and say, well, up to you.

6262c5b7-b2ae-410b-9294-0ff8017e2a3a-0
00:30:45.760 --> 00:30:46.720
You keep the mirror or not.

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00:30:46.720 --> 00:30:49.626
But just so you know,
that's something that triggers me as a

0c43556a-f396-437d-8961-4635f4ec83f1-1
00:30:49.626 --> 00:30:49.960
reader.

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00:30:50.280 --> 00:30:53.738
So we get to the Olive Garden and we get
there in Olivia's car,

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00:30:53.738 --> 00:30:57.360
which is interesting because of the Greek
God we're talking about.

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00:30:57.600 --> 00:30:59.440
You know,
there's a bit of a fusion happening here.

31630ced-fbae-405e-a4da-596055680daf-0
00:30:59.440 --> 00:31:02.911
It takes a little while for your mind to
kind of get around the details of what

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00:31:02.911 --> 00:31:04.040
are you wanting a chariot?

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00:31:04.040 --> 00:31:04.880
Oh, no, that's Roman.

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00:31:05.880 --> 00:31:07.280
No, I'm not wanting anything.

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00:31:07.280 --> 00:31:11.713
It's just this universe has rules and it
just takes a little while to kind of get

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00:31:11.713 --> 00:31:12.200
in there.

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00:31:12.200 --> 00:31:13.760
But I think it they make sense.

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00:31:13.760 --> 00:31:15.680
They make internal logical sense.

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00:31:15.680 --> 00:31:16.440
There's not an issue.

e7402098-888e-4eee-8f09-620fb77c7e00-0
00:31:17.280 --> 00:31:20.304
And I want to call out this line because
you mentioned it had something to do with

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00:31:20.304 --> 00:31:22.600
Taylor Swift and I didn't really
understand it when I read it.

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00:31:23.320 --> 00:31:27.580
Does the embarrassment of his Olive
Garden realm outweigh his ********

131d13c6-f2ea-468a-a945-dab1a634f7dc-1
00:31:27.580 --> 00:31:28.480
Redwood status?

697d0e88-b9a3-4f03-b058-3096aa2019c0-0
00:31:28.560 --> 00:31:30.640
And I was like, is he a tree?

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00:31:32.360 --> 00:31:33.320
What does that mean?

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00:31:33.920 --> 00:31:35.080
Holly knows what it means.

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00:31:35.160 --> 00:31:38.960
OK, look, I'm, I'm not a Swifty myself.

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00:31:38.960 --> 00:31:39.960
I know Holly is.

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00:31:39.960 --> 00:31:42.440
But it's, there's a song called Redwood,
I believe.

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00:31:42.440 --> 00:31:45.280
And I, I think it's about Travis Kelsey.

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00:31:45.840 --> 00:31:47.280
That's my assumption.

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00:31:47.760 --> 00:31:50.960
What she's saying is he's massive.

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00:31:51.160 --> 00:31:51.440
All right.

7e396f57-0a9d-48ee-aaa0-4774a7478ebd-0
00:31:51.680 --> 00:31:54.155
Yeah,
I guess that makes the biggest tree in

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00:31:54.155 --> 00:31:54.760
the forest.

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00:31:54.800 --> 00:31:56.120
That makes sense.

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00:31:56.200 --> 00:31:56.840
But it's.

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00:31:57.120 --> 00:31:57.760
Yeah, I didn't.

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00:31:57.760 --> 00:31:59.000
I didn't get it in this context.

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00:31:59.200 --> 00:31:59.560
I did.

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00:31:59.640 --> 00:32:01.834
But yeah, I mean,
that is a bit of assumed knowledge,

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00:32:01.834 --> 00:32:02.160
I guess.

204b377c-7b8c-4a22-a393-11dc8b45c8b5-0
00:32:02.440 --> 00:32:05.196
And yeah,
it can be tricky sometimes with that kind

204b377c-7b8c-4a22-a393-11dc8b45c8b5-1
00:32:05.196 --> 00:32:08.800
of phrasing because now you're thinking,
literally, this is a tree.

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00:32:08.880 --> 00:32:09.160
Yeah.

5bd3b0ea-9a26-4f87-9c7a-d68e4cb32c59-0
00:32:09.160 --> 00:32:10.880
So you've got to be careful with that,
I guess.

e4e26ab1-8f2c-4547-82d3-af790cb38e18-0
00:32:11.080 --> 00:32:14.110
And that's like,
I guess a quirk of what you put in there

e4e26ab1-8f2c-4547-82d3-af790cb38e18-1
00:32:14.110 --> 00:32:16.880
from your own experience as a as a Taylor
Swift fan.

f5e5f491-6c02-4b85-8d45-86dae00ce69a-0
00:32:17.200 --> 00:32:19.640
And it connects with the other Taylor
Swift fans.

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00:32:19.800 --> 00:32:21.000
And for others, not so much.

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00:32:21.000 --> 00:32:22.400
So you're just making a decision.

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00:32:22.560 --> 00:32:24.160
Who am I trying to connect with here?

31902260-f164-4982-ae5a-80bf39422f41-0
00:32:24.960 --> 00:32:30.465
But what I like that Holly's doing here
is maintaining the sexual energy and

31902260-f164-4982-ae5a-80bf39422f41-1
00:32:30.465 --> 00:32:33.040
building it up through the sequence.

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00:32:33.040 --> 00:32:37.896
So we've got the phallic breadstick,
which I believe, as I understand,

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00:32:37.896 --> 00:32:39.880
is a feature of Olive Garden.

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00:32:39.880 --> 00:32:42.320
The breadsticks, Yeah, unlimited,
I understand.

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00:32:42.560 --> 00:32:46.227
Well, in this case especially,
they're unlimited in a different way,

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00:32:46.227 --> 00:32:50.640
perhaps because there isn't much sexual
about an Olive Garden, as I understand it.

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00:32:50.640 --> 00:32:52.120
To me, it's not a sexy place.

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00:32:52.120 --> 00:32:55.680
You don't go there to to do sexual things.

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00:32:55.840 --> 00:32:59.880
So I think you've got to work to add that
energy into the scene.

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00:33:00.320 --> 00:33:02.920
And she does that what I think is great.

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00:33:02.920 --> 00:33:07.041
And like, again,
we say this is not Olive Garden attendees,

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00:33:07.041 --> 00:33:12.810
but knowing the trope about it and what a
horrible date location it is potentially,

ac09815c-4a17-426e-9759-cbabc0ef8c47-2
00:33:12.810 --> 00:33:16.520
let's put it this way,
an unimpressive date location.

c9217a3a-258a-4be2-bfc4-a776dc0d3bae-0
00:33:16.760 --> 00:33:19.645
So the idea that this D list,
as she puts it,

c9217a3a-258a-4be2-bfc4-a776dc0d3bae-1
00:33:19.645 --> 00:33:22.280
God is taking her to Olive Garden as well.

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00:33:22.280 --> 00:33:25.120
And their first date is a big part of
what makes this funny too.

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00:33:25.120 --> 00:33:26.600
That's the relatable thing, right?

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00:33:26.880 --> 00:33:29.086
Like,
finally got a date with some guy and he's

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00:33:29.086 --> 00:33:32.120
and he's hot and whatever,
and then he takes you to Olive Garden.

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00:33:32.120 --> 00:33:33.040
It's like Papao.

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00:33:33.600 --> 00:33:34.720
So I love that.

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00:33:34.720 --> 00:33:37.440
I love that that all works together as
part of the theme.

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00:33:37.880 --> 00:33:42.353
And so look, it is, I guess,
maybe a bit of a surprising moment as

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00:33:42.353 --> 00:33:46.160
they are at the Olive Garden enjoying
their breadsticks.

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00:33:46.160 --> 00:33:47.520
There's a bit of innuendo happening.

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00:33:47.520 --> 00:33:50.880
There's a little bit of implication
that's taking place.

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00:33:51.520 --> 00:33:58.647
But fairly quickly his hand snakes up my
skirt and she welcomes him in to her own

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00:33:58.647 --> 00:34:00.560
personal Olive Garden.

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00:34:03.880 --> 00:34:08.860
I think there's a little bit for me,
a bit of a logic thing around it gets

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00:34:08.860 --> 00:34:10.520
very sexual very quickly.

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00:34:10.880 --> 00:34:12.760
In what context is that happening?

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00:34:12.760 --> 00:34:13.960
Are they alone or not?

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00:34:13.960 --> 00:34:17.360
And, and she's very,
very keen very quickly.

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00:34:17.520 --> 00:34:19.840
Yeah, despite some initial reluctance.

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00:34:19.960 --> 00:34:22.416
I mean, look,
he's hot and that's really driving the

4b8b92ef-a8e3-42fa-a95e-8b95e7c9574f-1
00:34:22.416 --> 00:34:22.880
situation.

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00:34:23.240 --> 00:34:27.152
But maybe we do need a little bit more
emotional justification or something

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00:34:27.152 --> 00:34:28.800
between them that really sparks.

06e82b63-1e7c-4e9d-b82a-057980e26fb7-0
00:34:28.800 --> 00:34:30.760
This is more than just he's hot.

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00:34:30.760 --> 00:34:33.280
And that kind of overcomes all of her.

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00:34:33.320 --> 00:34:35.120
Yeah, instantly overcomes everything.

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00:34:35.160 --> 00:34:37.360
I mean,
I think it's OK for that to be the case.

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00:34:37.360 --> 00:34:41.829
But I think maybe what we're both hinting
at here is that there needs to be a

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00:34:41.829 --> 00:34:43.720
little bit more cause and effect.

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00:34:43.880 --> 00:34:46.320
Like things are happening and it's all
funny and it's great.

19bc49c5-1bf8-4147-b6ba-b1250e6b3468-0
00:34:46.480 --> 00:34:48.680
But you know,
we talk about the line of dominoes.

b27a4473-694c-4117-8133-2ce5535a63f8-0
00:34:48.880 --> 00:34:51.355
How is one thing causing the next thing
to happen,

b27a4473-694c-4117-8133-2ce5535a63f8-1
00:34:51.355 --> 00:34:53.200
which causes the next thing to happen.

833ebfd4-a73c-466f-922a-b27f6d089cb7-0
00:34:53.200 --> 00:34:55.640
So an action and then a reaction.

681dba36-b999-4046-b522-2b5e2829d68b-0
00:34:55.920 --> 00:34:58.804
And from that reaction,
something else happens and then we react

681dba36-b999-4046-b522-2b5e2829d68b-1
00:34:58.804 --> 00:34:59.160
to that.

f10d1757-9548-4734-80e7-76c220e2bacf-0
00:34:59.160 --> 00:35:02.195
So, you know,
we talked in other stories about how it's

f10d1757-9548-4734-80e7-76c220e2bacf-1
00:35:02.195 --> 00:35:03.280
like, let's **** OK?

07913bda-1cc7-4fe2-90d6-3b07fa2e69ea-0
00:35:03.280 --> 00:35:06.480
Like this is one of those stories that's
a bit like that let's **** OK?

bd416332-b9dd-4ca5-b79c-676a908160b1-0
00:35:06.840 --> 00:35:10.600
And I think it's more satisfying if we
get that push and pull ****.

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00:35:10.600 --> 00:35:13.160
There's a bit of conflict, you know,
he arrives and he's hot.

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00:35:13.160 --> 00:35:13.680
Great.

df5b00e3-2c20-4eb2-bdc2-39ef61e234bb-0
00:35:13.680 --> 00:35:18.520
And but then we arrive at Olive Garden,
and now I'm deflated.

4d0e8c80-f9cc-436c-8d93-24c1a83ba40d-0
00:35:18.880 --> 00:35:21.400
All right,
but how did we get from there to now?

5559e797-6ab0-4512-8d54-7b66d94dd4db-0
00:35:21.400 --> 00:35:24.280
Like, he's got his hand inside her.

68554ca9-78dd-4294-860d-556d2c0cb8dc-0
00:35:24.440 --> 00:35:24.640
Yeah.

03697f1a-03d4-4d9b-944b-98848e932bc7-0
00:35:24.680 --> 00:35:26.560
Without too much ceremony.

7c532292-8566-4a4d-80e9-580e8612d154-0
00:35:26.840 --> 00:35:29.840
Yeah, she's, you know,
got the breadsticks going.

06b221e3-09d3-4ec8-98d5-135b40922261-0
00:35:29.840 --> 00:35:31.960
Like, how did we get from there to there?

b6f6748b-0931-4787-b3fe-2d103c64bb91-0
00:35:31.960 --> 00:35:36.269
And what's actually happened is it's
taken them 20 minutes getting past people

b6f6748b-0931-4787-b3fe-2d103c64bb91-1
00:35:36.269 --> 00:35:40.250
into the restaurant and not that time
spent building up what's happening

b6f6748b-0931-4787-b3fe-2d103c64bb91-2
00:35:40.250 --> 00:35:40.960
between them.

9ad37920-eea9-4c95-a9ff-c5ae803928e4-0
00:35:40.960 --> 00:35:42.560
Not to mention she's.

9b7caf69-c481-4c82-8475-bdc0e00c383e-0
00:35:42.920 --> 00:35:45.440
Her background is finally.

48be0b6a-677b-4c59-9aa4-409c2a9ccd95-0
00:35:45.440 --> 00:35:46.360
She's on a date.

ff7710a4-3274-4a1c-9dbf-4c1ff154e310-0
00:35:46.560 --> 00:35:46.840
Yeah.

7bf5d17c-b89a-4c4a-9050-ffec17bca336-0
00:35:46.840 --> 00:35:48.680
You know, it's not like she's, yeah.

dd9daf5e-64d4-43ac-a7e9-3b898b582e2d-0
00:35:48.760 --> 00:35:49.720
Playing the field.

a78794d2-4b4a-46ba-a364-f2a145f91ec8-0
00:35:49.720 --> 00:35:51.410
She's not experienced in this kind of
thing,

a78794d2-4b4a-46ba-a364-f2a145f91ec8-1
00:35:51.410 --> 00:35:53.440
but she's acting like someone who's very
experienced.

3f44b7bb-4a95-45fc-914b-0cf7d2518fa0-0
00:35:53.440 --> 00:35:53.920
Yeah.

7852c3bf-a49c-47f4-9b9e-79364dd169ce-0
00:35:54.360 --> 00:35:57.308
And look,
this is a story that's pure entertainment,

7852c3bf-a49c-47f4-9b9e-79364dd169ce-1
00:35:57.308 --> 00:35:59.200
so you don't need to overthink it.

997fefcf-1e6b-492c-ab61-8a17234991f1-0
00:35:59.240 --> 00:36:01.240
I still had a good time reading this
story.

72d89b17-62d8-4c52-9750-a6d367a1ed18-0
00:36:01.240 --> 00:36:04.517
I didn't need to be like, oh,
but what was her internal motivation when

72d89b17-62d8-4c52-9750-a6d367a1ed18-1
00:36:04.517 --> 00:36:05.200
she ****** him?

bb0c538d-70b4-4f43-878c-708707dc5474-0
00:36:05.200 --> 00:36:08.000
Like, you don't,
you don't necessarily have to go there.

5e63a3c0-5818-49d8-b363-adbdacd32ebf-0
00:36:08.360 --> 00:36:12.989
But I think in this competition setting,
we're sort of feeling that lack of

5e63a3c0-5818-49d8-b363-adbdacd32ebf-1
00:36:12.989 --> 00:36:16.157
cohesion,
we're feeling that lack of structure that

5e63a3c0-5818-49d8-b363-adbdacd32ebf-2
00:36:16.157 --> 00:36:17.680
leads us to this outcome.

55178fad-6e20-4447-a708-f2d16a80db49-0
00:36:17.680 --> 00:36:20.680
And absolutely that's something worth
striving for.

03a05ec4-b2bf-4731-b5bc-233d400be5be-0
00:36:20.680 --> 00:36:26.000
Even though the story is already hot and
funny and it does the job the way it is.

8d82aa71-fe89-43e0-add1-652e66207096-0
00:36:26.120 --> 00:36:30.008
I think the more you can make your
characters feel like real people with

8d82aa71-fe89-43e0-add1-652e66207096-1
00:36:30.008 --> 00:36:33.205
real motivations,
even if you leave all the funny stuff the

8d82aa71-fe89-43e0-add1-652e66207096-2
00:36:33.205 --> 00:36:35.762
same,
the greater impact it has because they're

8d82aa71-fe89-43e0-add1-652e66207096-3
00:36:35.762 --> 00:36:37.840
acting as people with real motivations.

01256872-e3e4-4d3e-8b5a-40c26697c8c9-0
00:36:37.840 --> 00:36:39.640
You can identify with them,
all that kind of thing.

942033ca-44f3-4e5c-9e04-2f4a551ecfc2-0
00:36:39.960 --> 00:36:42.080
And then you have the the human layer on
top.

6ad42a92-6fbf-45a5-bf96-28327bce2841-0
00:36:42.800 --> 00:36:49.480
But I think in this case,
Holly is just keen to get to the Alfredo.

1c07fb9a-51a0-4096-a2f9-59e52df8054b-0
00:36:49.920 --> 00:36:52.248
Basically,
we're keen to get into the sex scene,

1c07fb9a-51a0-4096-a2f9-59e52df8054b-1
00:36:52.248 --> 00:36:54.720
which is, which is understandable,
which I support.

d5abe918-523a-48ca-aa9f-df3738696c0a-0
00:36:54.720 --> 00:36:56.040
This is neurotic fiction.

d8ffda33-9c2b-409b-9b07-a2f73c0b2f38-0
00:36:56.480 --> 00:36:57.760
It's a neurotic fiction comp.

bfadc439-fece-484a-8045-c3424273f5ff-0
00:36:58.040 --> 00:36:59.160
We want to see the sex.

f9b26701-fb0b-4269-86ac-72e51692bc90-0
00:36:59.160 --> 00:37:00.080
And that's what we're getting.

cecf9941-4c33-4708-a2c8-ff595229d2c2-0
00:37:00.080 --> 00:37:00.440
Yeah.

4763fab8-22c7-402a-b670-f5dc5ea0299e-0
00:37:00.720 --> 00:37:05.217
And she definitely, like,
infuses the dish with all of these little

4763fab8-22c7-402a-b670-f5dc5ea0299e-1
00:37:05.217 --> 00:37:07.400
references that are a lot of fun.

4837312c-9d57-4d59-bc9b-300f2466e036-0
00:37:07.400 --> 00:37:07.840
Yeah.

2a11cee9-f2b6-4faf-bed7-e39392ea2c3e-0
00:37:07.880 --> 00:37:08.960
Got them all in there.

93643431-31e4-449f-8a8d-90c84752f59f-0
00:37:08.960 --> 00:37:09.440
Yeah.

56e50cc3-573a-41db-9de9-0fae313707f6-0
00:37:09.440 --> 00:37:09.920
Yeah.

123e5572-c524-40fd-9a5c-113bb356daf2-0
00:37:09.920 --> 00:37:12.200
Got the breadstick, we've got the salad.

6721fa9b-b562-44e3-999a-0d0e46ebe77a-0
00:37:12.200 --> 00:37:13.840
Got a tiramisu?

3dd79f78-8091-4d38-a62d-86138b60439a-0
00:37:14.160 --> 00:37:17.280
It's, you know,
like a never ending Super Bowl.

d6a97b23-5fb9-4aa3-a6dc-9f5c4d256e84-0
00:37:18.720 --> 00:37:21.647
You,
if you ever insert 2 fingers inside a

d6a97b23-5fb9-4aa3-a6dc-9f5c4d256e84-1
00:37:21.647 --> 00:37:25.050
woman and then say like a never ending
soup bowl,

d6a97b23-5fb9-4aa3-a6dc-9f5c4d256e84-2
00:37:25.050 --> 00:37:29.680
you're sure to get a positive response
back to that little analogy.

926ea551-e8cb-43c7-a50f-f138d7b994a6-0
00:37:32.160 --> 00:37:34.400
And we encourage you all to try that at
home.

d6cf639e-3e8a-419a-9bc3-299739361d0a-0
00:37:34.400 --> 00:37:36.894
Yeah,
I think here there's a comment like as

d6cf639e-3e8a-419a-9bc3-299739361d0a-1
00:37:36.894 --> 00:37:41.384
things are getting heated and it's really
fun and we've got all this these Olive

d6cf639e-3e8a-419a-9bc3-299739361d0a-2
00:37:41.384 --> 00:37:44.766
Garden references,
though we do dip back into that territory

d6cf639e-3e8a-419a-9bc3-299739361d0a-3
00:37:44.766 --> 00:37:47.760
of the idiomatic expression or the cliche
expression.

fdb4e148-ee8a-4e68-9f73-cee58df9cd63-0
00:37:47.760 --> 00:37:52.240
So we've got I wrap my arms around his
shoulders, hanging on for dear life.

66049685-9dc3-4e58-bde7-698b2c15f48e-0
00:37:52.440 --> 00:37:55.852
So this thing of hanging on for dear life
and which is, you know,

66049685-9dc3-4e58-bde7-698b2c15f48e-1
00:37:55.852 --> 00:37:59.834
a phrase that we hear all the time and
we're in the midst of all this really

66049685-9dc3-4e58-bde7-698b2c15f48e-2
00:37:59.834 --> 00:38:00.920
unique special stuff.

c7153520-ce88-460b-9219-ff4c4ba76a31-0
00:38:01.240 --> 00:38:04.200
And I would say try and stick with that
if you can.

022d10e9-ac40-4c17-976c-06b5e4b165c0-0
00:38:04.200 --> 00:38:07.396
And, and, you know,
those kinds of phrases can work as

022d10e9-ac40-4c17-976c-06b5e4b165c0-1
00:38:07.396 --> 00:38:10.710
character voice,
but I don't think it does work for this

022d10e9-ac40-4c17-976c-06b5e4b165c0-2
00:38:10.710 --> 00:38:11.640
character voice.

1bdf3166-d2aa-4568-9304-8c6660d33609-0
00:38:11.640 --> 00:38:15.329
She's a very specific character,
and I think perhaps she could think a

1bdf3166-d2aa-4568-9304-8c6660d33609-1
00:38:15.329 --> 00:38:17.720
little more uniquely about the
circumstances.

edcce03b-6702-40a9-a3c6-fff61bd0d70e-0
00:38:18.320 --> 00:38:22.329
And I think that's probably a risk with
****** fiction in particular,

edcce03b-6702-40a9-a3c6-fff61bd0d70e-1
00:38:22.329 --> 00:38:25.823
because some of these,
like you said it before in a previous

edcce03b-6702-40a9-a3c6-fff61bd0d70e-2
00:38:25.823 --> 00:38:28.572
episode,
like it's really the same stuff that's

edcce03b-6702-40a9-a3c6-fff61bd0d70e-3
00:38:28.572 --> 00:38:30.520
happening in all of these stories.

1b19c9a4-a3b7-4258-94f3-d5cde1944952-0
00:38:30.520 --> 00:38:32.840
When you really get down to it,
it's the same sort of stuff.

583c5ead-4752-4b08-9f59-0d0060548797-0
00:38:32.840 --> 00:38:35.520
So how do we describe that in a way that
feels fresh?

026aceeb-4e61-4b82-ad8a-aea729850a19-0
00:38:35.520 --> 00:38:39.061
And we don't need to,
we don't need to always be like inventing

026aceeb-4e61-4b82-ad8a-aea729850a19-1
00:38:39.061 --> 00:38:42.880
new and elaborate ways to describe
something fairly straightforward.

3a790f0c-056e-4582-80c2-093241840664-0
00:38:42.880 --> 00:38:47.695
But I think what we're trying to do is
just describe it in a way that fits the

3a790f0c-056e-4582-80c2-093241840664-1
00:38:47.695 --> 00:38:51.840
specific situation and the specific
characters as much as possible.

24bf01f8-f765-40bb-8e16-3bf865a0a2eb-0
00:38:52.120 --> 00:38:54.881
But yeah, like you said,
there is a lot here that keeps you

24bf01f8-f765-40bb-8e16-3bf865a0a2eb-1
00:38:54.881 --> 00:38:56.400
entertained and keeps you hooked.

4b7fc2a9-6030-491e-9310-8f7cf4dbfa4b-0
00:38:56.880 --> 00:39:00.000
And a lot of those phrases do fall into
the background.

bf59b790-e24b-41cf-84f9-3f9bf7964316-0
00:39:00.440 --> 00:39:01.520
I love the line.

bce8dd69-be43-4d98-af21-8f7e562f8481-0
00:39:01.520 --> 00:39:03.440
I'm hungry for some sausage.

a1a1ee3d-27d4-410d-a514-245c1fa9733a-0
00:39:03.440 --> 00:39:06.520
I think that's another fun food related.

a2acbc19-1e7e-4dfe-8017-a940670a664f-0
00:39:06.600 --> 00:39:09.800
They all are like,
I've been waiting to toss your salad.

976c378f-122e-48ee-b470-ba58d89a827b-0
00:39:09.800 --> 00:39:12.480
And all of that is great fun.

00614095-4a1f-4cc3-8961-3b8fe7e4aeab-0
00:39:12.640 --> 00:39:14.560
And that's what this story is about,
right?

85bb3eff-8cf6-4c0d-b574-ddcccef582e5-0
00:39:14.560 --> 00:39:19.403
This story is just like deliver those
gags because that's the whole point of

85bb3eff-8cf6-4c0d-b574-ddcccef582e5-1
00:39:19.403 --> 00:39:22.360
trying to make this unsexy thing
irresistible.

cefe1882-392b-47ee-90de-4c2e943cde87-0
00:39:22.880 --> 00:39:25.320
And I think look,
the the climax of this story,

cefe1882-392b-47ee-90de-4c2e943cde87-1
00:39:25.320 --> 00:39:27.760
the surprising moment is obviously the
Alfredo.

95921ab6-2af3-46f9-bff6-50544eed49c2-0
00:39:27.760 --> 00:39:28.760
And that's so good.

0e3a1d7f-739a-4f63-8b5a-3b9298e6d5ca-0
00:39:28.760 --> 00:39:30.320
That's the bit that stays with you.

a8f4aa27-3d06-4ee2-8054-1bfa41f67f75-0
00:39:30.720 --> 00:39:33.564
And also when you talk about Domino's
being knocked over,

a8f4aa27-3d06-4ee2-8054-1bfa41f67f75-1
00:39:33.564 --> 00:39:36.360
this is the bit that stays with our
protagonist as well.

ab2302cd-2810-466f-8a27-e5178ee9e195-0
00:39:36.560 --> 00:39:38.080
That's surprising for her.

4ed2676b-ebd2-472b-96e2-d49ed7af28d5-0
00:39:38.440 --> 00:39:40.760
And that's the thing that tips her over
the edge.

068a87d4-cb96-460f-975d-608b80223f8f-0
00:39:40.760 --> 00:39:43.280
I mean, she's already on board,
let's be real.

ff539c85-e4ae-4f60-9ade-9bdcd01c5b35-0
00:39:43.720 --> 00:39:48.120
But the Alfredo comes and then she's like,
yes, this is for me.

55bf8936-d592-484c-b803-36d50c26d9e7-0
00:39:48.160 --> 00:39:49.680
I'm on board now.

e1804523-bebb-47fe-8d61-728fe9f7151e-0
00:39:50.480 --> 00:39:52.320
This is a moment that a lot of stories
miss.

a76ac428-2999-4dfc-90f6-aa7cb02c13e5-0
00:39:52.320 --> 00:39:56.723
Like you can build these references in
and you can hit all the references and

a76ac428-2999-4dfc-90f6-aa7cb02c13e5-1
00:39:56.723 --> 00:40:01.240
it's still not quite satisfying because
you haven't taken us to the next level.

56bbef1e-ee80-43bf-b4bb-6d98301fc49d-0
00:40:01.480 --> 00:40:03.440
And I think that Alfredo is the next
level.

0492834f-8d11-4b8d-946a-295ee3d13a14-0
00:40:03.880 --> 00:40:05.080
Totally is, yes.

a2da3c7d-2b6d-47ce-8b40-8e9af060241b-0
00:40:05.080 --> 00:40:09.440
It's like if you're writing a comedy,
the comedy needs to reach a climax.

7bb738f1-2aa3-442c-bb5a-300dda257a10-0
00:40:09.480 --> 00:40:12.760
It needs the funniest bit right at the
end, the punchline.

f19905fc-8508-41c7-ae6d-23a11c76c607-0
00:40:12.760 --> 00:40:14.440
And the Alfredo is the punchline.

e1f76ef4-55d5-411b-bc5a-73cce70a69c8-0
00:40:14.440 --> 00:40:19.518
And everybody who has read this story,
that is the thing that that sticks with

e1f76ef4-55d5-411b-bc5a-73cce70a69c8-1
00:40:19.518 --> 00:40:19.840
them.

d1a2f132-8ed3-42c4-ba47-ead4ccf06c51-0
00:40:20.400 --> 00:40:28.167
And just the idea that this Greek God has
garlic come because she's like,

d1a2f132-8ed3-42c4-ba47-ead4ccf06c51-1
00:40:28.167 --> 00:40:33.520
it's just the funniest **** and so good,
so funny.

c381b4d3-26d8-45c8-a913-2f81b4b33de8-0
00:40:33.880 --> 00:40:37.560
I, I Holly, love your brand of ****** **.

b5b6d14f-e003-4eac-8362-fb2f18ae9646-0
00:40:37.640 --> 00:40:38.840
This is so good.

fd5ab064-4453-4d7f-98d2-c7d472cb32e6-0
00:40:39.320 --> 00:40:42.702
And I love that you're comfortable
sharing it and that you're comfortable

fd5ab064-4453-4d7f-98d2-c7d472cb32e6-1
00:40:42.702 --> 00:40:43.800
putting your name to it.

0fd2d7e3-bb38-47e6-bf8b-f74c335a944d-0
00:40:43.800 --> 00:40:45.000
It's really good.

667d84d5-f4d3-4e6c-a8e0-c1842edc0495-0
00:40:45.760 --> 00:40:49.737
I will say though,
that like after that moment, I don't know,

667d84d5-f4d3-4e6c-a8e0-c1842edc0495-1
00:40:49.737 --> 00:40:54.483
I I didn't quite get the ending there and
even reading it aloud just now,

667d84d5-f4d3-4e6c-a8e0-c1842edc0495-2
00:40:54.483 --> 00:40:56.280
it didn't quite land for me.

3d07d17d-7596-44e5-acdb-016bb9d103f5-0
00:40:56.280 --> 00:41:00.011
So I think maybe there's some work to be
done in the denim off, if you will,

3d07d17d-7596-44e5-acdb-016bb9d103f5-1
00:41:00.011 --> 00:41:03.840
Like I think you've mentioned it like
when you called that the comedic climax.

b8e5d15e-89b7-4f4d-9c10-b70898cfa221-0
00:41:03.840 --> 00:41:05.680
I feel yes, that's the comedic climax.

76fac3d9-772c-4634-bd4d-7293dc2a52ee-0
00:41:05.680 --> 00:41:11.355
Now we need the sexual climax and we end
the story a little bit before the sexual

76fac3d9-772c-4634-bd4d-7293dc2a52ee-1
00:41:11.355 --> 00:41:11.840
climax.

00fd5017-d789-4300-93b4-de512ee14eb2-0
00:41:11.840 --> 00:41:13.920
She says she hikes her skirt.

520297dd-db30-457a-89a5-66942b139e96-0
00:41:13.920 --> 00:41:17.920
She says fork me zaddy and he stuffs her.

386c9253-774a-4218-85ed-ea8d72efed0c-0
00:41:17.920 --> 00:41:22.475
And then like we didn't really get that
moment of like that climax happening in

386c9253-774a-4218-85ed-ea8d72efed0c-1
00:41:22.475 --> 00:41:27.088
full and the release that comes with that
and then their own little denim eye at

386c9253-774a-4218-85ed-ea8d72efed0c-2
00:41:27.088 --> 00:41:28.000
the end of that.

da08e8ef-b244-424b-ac53-816cb61e0541-0
00:41:28.440 --> 00:41:32.200
So I think we could have maybe taken that
a little bit further in that moment.

66e84a6d-cf3a-4018-8c03-2e01d1909373-0
00:41:32.200 --> 00:41:34.080
So we got kind of both climaxes.

ee8badcb-40de-463a-bb3e-428b70567a26-0
00:41:34.240 --> 00:41:34.640
Yeah.

af157fbf-6a67-4dfc-b6b9-4c019cb8b797-0
00:41:34.640 --> 00:41:37.760
And I mean,
I think like it's earlier in the action

af157fbf-6a67-4dfc-b6b9-4c019cb8b797-1
00:41:37.760 --> 00:41:42.620
where it's more sexual and more full on
and more sensory and there's a lot going

af157fbf-6a67-4dfc-b6b9-4c019cb8b797-2
00:41:42.620 --> 00:41:42.800
on.

ae35da26-825e-48ff-a888-2e813e947abc-0
00:41:42.800 --> 00:41:45.548
And then we get to the end there and it's
kind of like,

ae35da26-825e-48ff-a888-2e813e947abc-1
00:41:45.548 --> 00:41:47.560
and then they **** the end kind of thing.

a9b795c4-bc89-4fa6-af2b-1a1c03c1a57c-0
00:41:47.800 --> 00:41:53.573
And I think you need it to be reaching
that ultimate point where it is the most

a9b795c4-bc89-4fa6-af2b-1a1c03c1a57c-1
00:41:53.573 --> 00:41:58.120
explicit and the most full on moment of
the story potentially.

127e3a12-4e57-4802-9d0b-30b28f864404-0
00:41:58.120 --> 00:42:00.791
But again,
like this is a comedy and you came here

127e3a12-4e57-4802-9d0b-30b28f864404-1
00:42:00.791 --> 00:42:04.981
for the gag and we get the gags and the
gags are coming one after another after

127e3a12-4e57-4802-9d0b-30b28f864404-2
00:42:04.981 --> 00:42:07.599
another and then bam,
like that is a good choice.

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00:42:07.600 --> 00:42:12.520
So we don't want to lose that because I
think that's what makes this story great.

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00:42:13.040 --> 00:42:15.760
But you know,
we talk about like sticking the landing.

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00:42:15.760 --> 00:42:18.320
I don't think this quite sticks the
landing.

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00:42:18.320 --> 00:42:20.320
I think it sticks the climax for the
comedy.

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00:42:20.320 --> 00:42:25.638
And then I think just that ending needs
something and I'm not sure what because I

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00:42:25.638 --> 00:42:27.520
do love that she's happy now.

488e1abf-e27a-4bbe-8791-ca92e49a6a6d-0
00:42:27.520 --> 00:42:29.840
You know,
she's got one over on her sister.

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00:42:29.840 --> 00:42:32.298
Like all of that's coming together at the
end,

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00:42:32.298 --> 00:42:34.600
which is what makes for a satisfying
story.

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00:42:34.920 --> 00:42:39.472
I think maybe it just needs a little bit
of a rethink of what exactly that

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00:42:39.472 --> 00:42:40.080
emotional.

077ac8f9-6c81-4d4a-8a8b-d5272baefd8f-0
00:42:40.400 --> 00:42:44.523
It could just be a sequencing thing
because we have that climax with the

077ac8f9-6c81-4d4a-8a8b-d5272baefd8f-1
00:42:44.523 --> 00:42:47.630
Alfredo source,
and then she's even more worked up and

077ac8f9-6c81-4d4a-8a8b-d5272baefd8f-2
00:42:47.630 --> 00:42:48.760
she's like, fork me.

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00:42:48.760 --> 00:42:51.240
Maybe the fork me moment could come a bit
earlier.

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00:42:51.360 --> 00:42:51.600
Yeah.

438a4e8d-0bd3-49ba-b6eb-f8fc66ce3aeb-0
00:42:51.600 --> 00:42:53.520
So that the Alfredo becomes the climax.

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00:42:53.520 --> 00:42:56.620
And then the following that we get the
moment of like,

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00:42:56.620 --> 00:42:58.480
I finally kind of beat my sister.

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00:42:58.480 --> 00:42:59.840
Or if I found a way to.

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00:42:59.920 --> 00:43:00.280
Yeah.

871abe3c-44f9-4247-8b28-54f0a5d83d9c-0
00:43:00.280 --> 00:43:03.036
I mean,
if the Alfredo is the climactic moment,

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00:43:03.036 --> 00:43:04.760
then that has to be the thing.

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00:43:04.760 --> 00:43:05.120
Yeah.

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00:43:05.240 --> 00:43:06.960
And we don't keep going after her.

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00:43:06.960 --> 00:43:07.400
That's it.

b84a4689-58a9-4f59-a89b-5d27fc30fa8f-0
00:43:07.560 --> 00:43:08.240
That's the thing.

1c332814-06cf-4c9f-9a71-486827f5a97a-0
00:43:08.240 --> 00:43:11.280
And that's where she's absolutely head
over heels.

c4413007-311e-47d3-8fe9-c6147e1fa9e9-0
00:43:11.280 --> 00:43:17.616
But the but the emotional ending there,
that moment of we get the resolution of

c4413007-311e-47d3-8fe9-c6147e1fa9e9-1
00:43:17.616 --> 00:43:19.280
her initial conflict.

b730f04e-c457-44b7-a794-c80f3b864a2d-0
00:43:19.280 --> 00:43:22.240
The initial conflict that was set out at
the start was with her sister.

616af186-1ff9-4c4f-9bb8-2a22cad46881-0
00:43:22.600 --> 00:43:26.280
And that's what's being kind of resolved
and paid off in that final line.

cfd8511e-24e5-43f1-9349-b99e780ed8aa-0
00:43:26.280 --> 00:43:27.400
And I think that works well.

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00:43:27.480 --> 00:43:28.440
I like that as an ending.

dd592b5e-3e0a-4b6c-bc7f-15b72077a75c-0
00:43:28.440 --> 00:43:29.640
Yeah, absolutely.

97442282-6338-483d-9985-68a9b973ba25-0
00:43:30.400 --> 00:43:31.560
So what do you think?

95649034-dcbc-4f59-8a7a-717e06855a78-0
00:43:31.560 --> 00:43:34.960
Did Holly succeed in making Olive Garden
sexy?

84bef52e-7d69-4b5e-bfd7-0afeedb304f5-0
00:43:35.440 --> 00:43:36.480
I think so, yeah.

a860978a-3461-43ee-9f51-5cb16c7137f4-0
00:43:37.160 --> 00:43:42.720
If you are on your next trip to America,
view Olive Garden differently.

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00:43:43.360 --> 00:43:44.440
Have you ever been to Olive Garden?

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00:43:44.440 --> 00:43:45.200
You've been to America?

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00:43:45.240 --> 00:43:45.720
I haven't.

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00:43:45.720 --> 00:43:47.120
No, No, I haven't.

e60424e2-f260-4ee2-94a9-674fba40f221-0
00:43:47.120 --> 00:43:48.680
I've seen one, but I haven't been there.

da59fb66-35a8-490f-9175-986fd25f71ee-0
00:43:48.680 --> 00:43:49.800
Have been to Sizzler.

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00:43:49.960 --> 00:43:51.000
I mean Sizzler.

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00:43:51.000 --> 00:43:53.480
Like when you think about it,
it's sizzling.

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00:43:53.640 --> 00:43:54.640
Does it still exist?

1220317c-ed28-4a3d-a33a-5b07097afe31-0
00:43:54.640 --> 00:43:55.800
I know there are.

02571bd0-d71e-4ebe-86c0-910ec7bf247a-0
00:43:55.880 --> 00:43:59.040
I think there's still one in Sydney that
don't really want to go to Sizzler.

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00:43:59.800 --> 00:43:59.960
Yeah.

18b02bba-ea06-488f-bbbf-cb80165efcfa-0
00:43:59.960 --> 00:44:02.440
You just find a great God, God of Sizzler.

b2f879a2-8327-4855-a686-ccdc9bf91d3c-0
00:44:02.520 --> 00:44:04.760
What kind of God do you think would run a
Sizzler?

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00:44:05.080 --> 00:44:06.240
The God of salmonella.

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00:44:10.040 --> 00:44:10.560
So well done.

1979b32e-7c5b-4bc8-be27-f46ee1454a22-0
00:44:10.560 --> 00:44:13.609
Look, I think,
I think you've met your brief, Hollina,

1979b32e-7c5b-4bc8-be27-f46ee1454a22-1
00:44:13.609 --> 00:44:17.601
and achieved your aim of making an Olive
Garden sexy and in a way that,

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00:44:17.601 --> 00:44:18.600
like surprised us.

66c4cdee-7096-4197-a9b1-4d1189585e51-0
00:44:18.880 --> 00:44:20.680
And that's why you came very close to the
long list.

e84b6eaf-4978-4d68-a2ad-8363f8edf868-0
00:44:20.680 --> 00:44:22.760
I guess that's the big lingering question,
though.

e8ee48ac-197c-43bb-8596-9c06801bd968-0
00:44:22.760 --> 00:44:23.920
What was it?

08554df7-b976-4736-ac76-7b1776a0e416-0
00:44:24.240 --> 00:44:28.600
What was it that had us cutting this
story when it is so funny?

365bef87-7007-4621-b386-360ca8a5fc5a-0
00:44:28.680 --> 00:44:30.920
Yeah, objectively very funny story.

e315715f-084b-41ec-a32f-48c52fe12292-0
00:44:31.120 --> 00:44:35.080
So to answer that question,
I've just gone through my notes again.

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00:44:35.080 --> 00:44:36.360
So our judging notes.

de1cd38b-8968-4ae5-9677-5ec7cb073d39-0
00:44:36.360 --> 00:44:40.109
These are the judging notes from our
initial first round or when we actually

de1cd38b-8968-4ae5-9677-5ec7cb073d39-1
00:44:40.109 --> 00:44:40.840
read the story.

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00:44:41.040 --> 00:44:43.520
And look, I think it's a few things.

2a70e532-49f0-4261-a26f-9be82ebebe80-0
00:44:43.520 --> 00:44:46.280
I think there were a few things and it's
the things we've talked about.

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00:44:46.280 --> 00:44:49.160
So it was very funny that I've made that
comment.

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00:44:49.160 --> 00:44:50.160
It's very, very funny.

fd9184cb-7caa-4ebf-947a-2618a720a539-0
00:44:50.440 --> 00:44:54.341
But there was a little bit of confusion
in that setup that needed to be smoothed

fd9184cb-7caa-4ebf-947a-2618a720a539-1
00:44:54.341 --> 00:44:55.160
out a little bit.

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00:44:55.360 --> 00:45:00.396
And then just some logic questions,
one of which being how is he forking her

6cda5e7b-c2f9-4a27-83a3-10687c1a2e20-1
00:45:00.396 --> 00:45:04.844
immediately after garlic saucing
everywhere, which is a little bit,

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00:45:04.844 --> 00:45:05.760
no refractory.

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00:45:05.760 --> 00:45:07.280
No refractory.

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00:45:07.280 --> 00:45:08.680
But you know, he is a God.

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00:45:08.760 --> 00:45:09.680
So that's OK.

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00:45:09.680 --> 00:45:11.640
But we need to sort of explain that.

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00:45:11.640 --> 00:45:14.888
And as we said,
maybe they don't need to fork at all

3919c58d-d55a-46c2-a8af-f1bc36023414-1
00:45:14.888 --> 00:45:15.440
actually.

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00:45:15.840 --> 00:45:20.568
And then one other thing which is
interesting now that I go back and look

693cca1e-c547-4a73-9f1f-ce3114ec022e-1
00:45:20.568 --> 00:45:23.890
at my notes,
is that I got AI vibes from this story

693cca1e-c547-4a73-9f1f-ce3114ec022e-2
00:45:23.890 --> 00:45:28.043
reading it and you know,
going back now knowing that Holly wrote

693cca1e-c547-4a73-9f1f-ce3114ec022e-3
00:45:28.043 --> 00:45:30.280
it, absolutely don't feel that way.

1cee4448-89f8-4f1d-9cc4-55e612a955f9-0
00:45:30.280 --> 00:45:35.657
But I guess this thought that you could
put in Olive Garden as a prompt and then

1cee4448-89f8-4f1d-9cc4-55e612a955f9-1
00:45:35.657 --> 00:45:39.640
get all of these gags back kind of felt
like a possibility.

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00:45:39.640 --> 00:45:42.160
I'm going to read out my comment because
I had the same thing about AI.

aeb7ac31-faee-467e-ac10-26cd37503d87-0
00:45:42.160 --> 00:45:45.177
And I said,
it's a pity that every time I see an—I'm

aeb7ac31-faee-467e-ac10-26cd37503d87-1
00:45:45.177 --> 00:45:47.000
triggered into thinking it's AI.

1117b053-f642-4264-957e-dd491fcc5b8c-0
00:45:47.240 --> 00:45:51.860
This definitely has some of that to it,
But AI is not going to write a line like

1117b053-f642-4264-957e-dd491fcc5b8c-1
00:45:51.860 --> 00:45:55.626
with one hand wrapped around his shaft,
I take him into my mouth,

1117b053-f642-4264-957e-dd491fcc5b8c-2
00:45:55.626 --> 00:45:57.680
luxuriating at the feel of his ****.

5394fbe8-670c-44eb-b93c-797b8e7bc673-0
00:45:58.800 --> 00:46:02.800
And we talked about AI writing in some of
our flesh fiction episodes.

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00:46:02.800 --> 00:46:06.499
And this is like an example of like a
lion that is a human lion that you're

9e343ece-d6a0-4677-a65f-07b6bfb26fc0-1
00:46:06.499 --> 00:46:09.080
just not going to get out of a large
language model.

dd296090-f350-41ea-bfc1-560ea04fb9df-0
00:46:09.080 --> 00:46:15.285
You say that ChatGPT wouldn't say it
because ChatGPT is little ***** but I

dd296090-f350-41ea-bfc1-560ea04fb9df-1
00:46:15.285 --> 00:46:18.760
don't know, I feel like AI could say that.

1d12383c-5eb2-436d-99dc-fcfc0e5518d7-0
00:46:18.760 --> 00:46:20.963
But look,
that wasn't the deciding factor by any

1d12383c-5eb2-436d-99dc-fcfc0e5518d7-1
00:46:20.963 --> 00:46:23.121
means,
but it's just interesting to go back and

1d12383c-5eb2-436d-99dc-fcfc0e5518d7-2
00:46:23.121 --> 00:46:24.920
go, oh, OK, but we were really on guard.

88fbed4e-de07-41af-ad69-2cd1de324dbc-0
00:46:25.000 --> 00:46:27.215
Yeah,
we were during the we were we were

88fbed4e-de07-41af-ad69-2cd1de324dbc-1
00:46:27.215 --> 00:46:28.080
starred at that.

9301d751-1c47-4c90-bbd9-ecb3d332f8e5-0
00:46:28.080 --> 00:46:29.440
False positives all over the place.

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00:46:29.440 --> 00:46:30.440
Yeah, for sure.

586c0537-6f32-4f10-a644-ae3c84e0230e-0
00:46:30.720 --> 00:46:33.477
But look,
I think it really does come down to just

586c0537-6f32-4f10-a644-ae3c84e0230e-1
00:46:33.477 --> 00:46:37.694
some of that tightening, like ultimately,
and some of the logic stuff that we

586c0537-6f32-4f10-a644-ae3c84e0230e-2
00:46:37.694 --> 00:46:40.667
talked about,
and just kind of making sure all of that

586c0537-6f32-4f10-a644-ae3c84e0230e-3
00:46:40.667 --> 00:46:44.560
is tidied up so that we can just enjoy it
without any kind of friction.

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00:46:44.600 --> 00:46:44.920
Yeah.

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00:46:45.040 --> 00:46:48.691
And ultimately it just makes the whole
experience more satisfying when all those

fbd78f98-6a97-4c82-84c7-c4b92f813eee-1
00:46:48.691 --> 00:46:52.252
puzzle pieces fit together nicely and
perfectly and you don't kind of question

fbd78f98-6a97-4c82-84c7-c4b92f813eee-2
00:46:52.252 --> 00:46:53.920
why there are gaps in certain places.

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00:46:54.280 --> 00:46:56.280
It's just more satisfying as a whole.

b4f8cf64-c538-4791-bed0-178d3f33fa1c-0
00:46:56.280 --> 00:47:02.612
I'm just sorry my brain is going into the
gutter with all of everyone's going to

b4f8cf64-c538-4791-bed0-178d3f33fa1c-1
00:47:02.612 --> 00:47:08.320
put a satisfying whole is a great point
to end flesh fiction on, I feel.

4692b3e0-3c14-419b-b3a3-da06b0ebd4cd-0
00:47:09.200 --> 00:47:10.720
Oh, I don't want it to end.

5d853246-4407-4bba-8d0a-4f33d71f6a40-0
00:47:10.720 --> 00:47:14.760
Yeah, because that is actually the end,
I think the actual, actual end.

cc4988c4-add2-430f-be43-25caca3e6d36-0
00:47:14.760 --> 00:47:18.626
Well, having said that,
we have some books coming out and we have

cc4988c4-add2-430f-be43-25caca3e6d36-1
00:47:18.626 --> 00:47:23.255
the very first volume of flesh fiction
available now, today, this very moment,

cc4988c4-add2-430f-be43-25caca3e6d36-2
00:47:23.255 --> 00:47:24.720
if you go on our website.

75d734a7-0a61-4ca5-a72e-4389a0d9bb82-0
00:47:24.720 --> 00:47:25.080
Yeah.

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00:47:25.080 --> 00:47:27.635
And I hope you do because this book
seriously,

fc66b1ac-ccc8-4495-a1ff-faa0b86707d4-1
00:47:27.635 --> 00:47:30.680
like if you're going to buy any book,
make it this one.

3ba8a1ce-218d-4fea-8fee-040f73734103-0
00:47:30.760 --> 00:47:36.811
It really does give you that experience
that we had of encountering just the most

3ba8a1ce-218d-4fea-8fee-040f73734103-1
00:47:36.811 --> 00:47:39.320
random assortment of human desire.

ae7723c3-7336-4549-beab-7980ef78d3c9-0
00:47:39.320 --> 00:47:40.960
It's a smorgasbord.

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00:47:41.200 --> 00:47:42.120
It is a smorgasbord.

4cde5625-62b6-493a-8cfa-dcbeb350756e-0
00:47:42.440 --> 00:47:43.800
You might say it's a buffet.

5fee5f1c-c69f-43bd-8047-a1ed5a4171aa-0
00:47:44.160 --> 00:47:47.360
It's a buffet and the breadsticks are
unlimited.

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00:47:47.360 --> 00:47:49.520
They are unlimited.

a883adf1-f567-4a2f-8f3a-fadc739f2b6b-0
00:47:49.560 --> 00:47:52.350
But like quite seriously, you know, and,
and again,

a883adf1-f567-4a2f-8f3a-fadc739f2b6b-1
00:47:52.350 --> 00:47:55.516
this was our experience of judging,
there's funny stories,

a883adf1-f567-4a2f-8f3a-fadc739f2b6b-2
00:47:55.516 --> 00:47:58.521
there's super hot stories,
there's kind of sad stories,

a883adf1-f567-4a2f-8f3a-fadc739f2b6b-3
00:47:58.521 --> 00:48:00.399
there's like everything in between.

be14d10a-03f6-4b3a-a8b1-47fb7fe3569f-0
00:48:00.760 --> 00:48:05.180
But all of it is fascinating because
there is an element for every single

be14d10a-03f6-4b3a-a8b1-47fb7fe3569f-1
00:48:05.180 --> 00:48:09.720
story where that author was putting
themselves out there and taking a risk.

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And that's what feels really cool.

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I think about these stories more so maybe
than our regular competition.

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So absolutely,
please do jump on our website and grab a

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00:48:19.739 --> 00:48:24.760
copy for yourself, one for your nan,
one for your mum, and enjoy.

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And 30 stories, More than 30 stories,
300 pages.

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That's a lot of smarts, a lot of Devi.

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Count how many,
how many ***** I did count how many *****

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I texted you how many ***** there were.

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I'll tell you right now,
it was averaging over 2 per story,

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which considering some stories had no men
in them,

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makes for an interesting percentage.

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Yeah, find them all like a Where's Wally?

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A Where's Willie?

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Where's Willie?

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We've also got two more volumes coming
out this year, hopefully,

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if we can get them all out this year.

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So that's a whole bunch of stories and a
reminder that Amanda and I have both

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written a story that feature somewhere in
these three books.

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So read them and try and figure it out.

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Yeah.

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See if you can just see guesses.

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And look, we're not shy.

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It's OK.

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We're we're interested to find out when
our secret will be revealed.

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00:49:22.800 --> 00:49:25.781
But for now,
we'll pretend we'll hide behind our our

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pseudonyms.

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But thank you again, Holly,
for being a fourth time Daredevil,

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a second time baredevil.

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Let's say you're the only person who has
been a baredevil twice, a ******* pioneer.

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And.

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And who knows if flesh fiction would even
exist without Johnson and Johnson.

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Truly.

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00:49:44.480 --> 00:49:44.720
Yeah.

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When I think about it now and pave the
way,

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I think it was the first ****** reading
of a story.

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So yes, thank you, Holly.

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Maybe it was you who after all of this
inspired flesh Fiction into that seed,

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so to speak.

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But look, you know,
Never Say Never might be back again.

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But for the time being,
thank you to every single person who

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00:50:05.685 --> 00:50:07.640
submitted a story to Flesh fiction.

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The experience of reading and judging and
just immersing ourselves in the gutter

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00:50:13.800 --> 00:50:15.080
for months on end.

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I already miss it.

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It's life changing.

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Like I know that sounds dramatic,
but like it's been so fun and brought so

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much joy and I hope it's brought joy to
everybody listening and encourage you all

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00:50:28.242 --> 00:50:30.720
to just go back and luxuriate in it.

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Enjoy the story readings,
luxuriate in it like a Greek God's ****.

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So thank you everyone.

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And like,
I think it's about time we close the door

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00:50:41.411 --> 00:50:44.120
on on flesh fiction for the time being.

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Who knows what the future has to offer,
but we'll be back.

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We'll be back with our with our normal
God.

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How do we go back to normal after this?

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I know look,
it's it's always a little bit abnormal.

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We are called not quite right after all
for a reason.

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We'll be getting back together pretty
soon to record a regular episode which

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00:51:03.476 --> 00:51:08.132
hasn't we haven't had one come out since
like October about that last regular

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00:51:08.132 --> 00:51:10.640
episode was the 100th episode celebration.

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I think we're actually up to about 100
and 30 episodes now somehow and probably

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several more to come.

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Oh God, and we've got words on the waves.

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We've got words on the waves.

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We've actually got a new what's on like
an events page on a website.

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So if you're interested in catching
Amanda and I and want to know what we're

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00:51:28.162 --> 00:51:30.530
doing,
head of the website and click the link

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00:51:30.530 --> 00:51:32.279
and you will see what we're doing.

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And Amanda,
you've got a whole bunch of flash fiction

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courses coming out, workshops.

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00:51:36.680 --> 00:51:37.480
I'm very excited.

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So we've got on the Central Coast,
we've got with riding NSW Hornsby Library

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00:51:42.613 --> 00:51:44.880
and with writers Victoria as well.

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So I'll be going down to Victoria to
deliver a workshop.

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So if you are down that way,
please come along and love to meet you

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00:51:51.012 --> 00:51:53.480
and we can just chat flash stuff all day
long,

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00:51:53.480 --> 00:51:56.160
which is what I like to do and flash all
day long.

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I hear they're a bit looser about that
down down South.

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00:52:01.520 --> 00:52:02.880
Oh yeah, scarf mouth.

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I should shut my mouth is what should
happen right now.

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Shut your N mouth.

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Alright well I think it's about time when
you land at this plane and saw ourselves

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00:52:19.568 --> 00:52:20.280
out of the room.

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It's definitely like a water based
landing at this point we're in trouble

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00:52:25.393 --> 00:52:25.680
with.

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All right, without further ado,
let's get the **** out of here.

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Thank you everyone for joining us for
Flesh Fiction,

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and we'll be back very shortly without
regularly scheduled programming.

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00:52:37.920 --> 00:52:41.400
But until then, right on, right on.

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We hope you enjoyed this special
Daredevil episode of Not Quite Right.

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00:52:47.600 --> 00:52:51.418
If you have thoughts on this story,
follow us on social media and join the

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conversation.

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And if you'd like to participate in the
next round of the competition,

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00:52:55.955 --> 00:52:58.360
head over to our website at notquiteright.
com.

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00:52:58.720 --> 00:53:05.400
That's WRITE something doesn't seem quite
right.

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My hand drifts from his balls,
one finger slipping into that glorious

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00:53:17.650 --> 00:53:18.080
****.

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1 little finger one.

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OK,
repeat the line about the balls in the

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****.

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Yes, boss.